Unchain the colors before my eyes,
Yesterday's sorrows, tomorrow's white lies.
Scan the horizon, the clouds take me higher,
I shall return from out of fire.
Tears for rememberance, and tears for joy,
Tears for somebody and this lonely boy.
Out in the madness, the all seeing eye,
Flickers above us, to light up the sky.
2007-03-15 06:14:07 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Hi Sister M,
You've got talent there. Your poem is expressive and open.
After reading it over several times, though, I get the deep
feeling that there is more of this poem you're not sharing. It
just doesn't feel like it's finished, yet. You have more inside
you that's begging to come out---so, let it out!!
2007-03-15 06:26:59 · answer #1 · answered by SlownEasy 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This poem seems too possess sadness but there's some encourage and hope inside the poem to enlight the poem in the point of my view. Quite a good one.
2007-03-15 13:20:25 · answer #2 · answered by SKyLaR 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You`re on a roll here keep it up & let`s read some of your other work as well?6/10
2007-03-15 13:53:22 · answer #3 · answered by edison 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that is a good poem i give it a 8/10 good job
2007-03-15 13:16:45 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its lovley. Write some more.
2007-03-15 13:17:52 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
IT MAKES ME THINK ABOUT THINGS
2007-03-15 13:17:31 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it.
2007-03-15 13:17:10 · answer #7 · answered by jean d 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
NO
2007-03-15 13:16:35 · answer #8 · answered by ashymojo 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋