What’s today? Does it really matter? Day after day, what’s different about them? Each morning you wake up, to find you are all alone. Each day you go about your life, to find that you are the only one who is alone. Each night you go home, to be alone, each night you go to bed to find no one if there waiting for you. What’s the point? Is there any hope left? Does anyone have the answers to all your questions? Why do I even care?
Well I will answer, today is the day that you excepted Christ as your Savior, so yes it matters. You are still here because God is not finished with you yet. Perhaps you fill alone right now but God will bless you with someone who loves you when he thinks the time is right. God, is the only one with all the answers so if you don’t have him in your life, you will never know all the answers to all your questions in life. As far for why I care, I hate seeing people un-happy. So there you have it, now you know what you should be doing, pick up your Bible and find the promises that God has for you.
2007-03-14 11:48:01 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
above is a short writing piece I have just written. What do you think about it?
Feel free to be honest, and remember that this is a piece I wrote, so it is not meant as anything personal to you. Just remember, that you can express your feelings without being rude.
2007-03-14 11:49:49 · update #1
I think you are really amazing.
You go sis!
2007-03-14 11:58:30 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
One suggestion. Read things from the last sentence back to the first, one sentence at a time. There are too many words that are incorrect. They are correctly spelled but you used the wrong word (e.g. excepted when you meant accepted).
A more substantive suggestion would be to focus. God may be all things to all people but try not to make him all things to one paragraph. You start with loneliness and it's basically well done. But rather than offer the "Jesus walks with me" as a counter to this loneliness you go off on a series of tangents which confuse rather than clarify, continue rather than conclude, and leave one thinking, to quote you, "does it really matter?"
And, to add a personal note, I have tried it with and without Jesus and without is fine for me.
2007-03-14 18:54:01 · answer #2 · answered by Dave P 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
a nice depressing thought moving piece until God appeared and turned it into a preaching session.
2007-03-14 18:51:27 · answer #3 · answered by Skeptic123 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Had some good potential but I think it fell off half way thru. Nice try though.
2007-03-14 19:06:48 · answer #4 · answered by Christopher M 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think you should get some real friends not imaginary ones.
2007-03-14 18:52:49 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Started well, faded badly.
2007-03-14 18:51:35 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's inspiring.
2007-03-14 18:52:35 · answer #7 · answered by pepsiolic 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's too long.
2007-03-14 18:53:43 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋