This is a poem I wrote, what do U think??

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This is a poem I wrote, what do U think??

The day's just beginning
You see the girl you love
You don't know what to do or say
You're friends
You talk to eachother everyday
On the phone, computer, etc
You're walking with her
Talking, laughing, having the time of your life
The sun hits ya, you smile at her she smiles at you
It's time to say goodbye
You hug and walk off
You're walking, past places where we played as kids
Later you talk to eachother
Time's ending
You say you'll see eachother tomorrow
You know what
You're in goddamn love
Is there anything else better in the world

2007-03-13 15:20:50 · 2 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating

2 answers

it dosn't sound too bad but it dose need a little work........

2007-03-13 15:27:06 · answer #1 · answered by ladyjamie 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋

That was horrible! Seriously, what the **** were you thinking?

2007-03-13 22:24:12 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋