Someone PLEASE HELP ME,Im begging PLEASE!?

Question

It's necessary for a parent to use the double-edged "sword" of love and
discipline because they want their kids to be obedient and respectful. If a parent tries to be
their children's friend , their kid is not going to take things seriously. He/She are going to
think that everything is a joke that they can get away with. Parents who try to be their kids
friend, set up themselves for problems in the future. If a parent just tries to be a friend
their children will follow their parents example of how they are being raised. Sometimes
parents think that by being their children's friend is going to build a strong relationship,
parents can be their child's friend. However their children have to always remember that
they are also their parents. When their children reach to adulthood their attitude and
rebellion are going to lead to consequences and major problems in the future. A
parent must teach their kids to be obedient , setting up rules and telling them what's
right and wrong. My parents always taugh me manners , because not having them
shows a bad personality about ourselves. I have a cousin and she is 4 and she is
very rebellious , if she doesn't get what she wants she will start to make a big scene
and to make matters worse she will start yelling at her mom in public.I think that her
mom and dad should take action , because thay are setting her up for failure in the future.
Her attitude would not be convenient to them. Children like this are just taking advantage
of their parents and they should take action for this situation. In order to raise a
responsible and compassionate human being , parents need to take action of how
to discipline their children , this is going to benefit both of them.

Can someone please give me feedback on my essay,please I'm begging.Their is no one at the moment for I to readed to. I will really appreciated, THANK YOU!

Answer 1

I get the point you are trying to make in your essay, however, it is extremely redundant...you state the same thing over and over. Also, there are some grammatical errors. Example: Take out the word "to" in this sentence-"When their children reach to adulthood". Also, you left the letter t off of taught. The following sentence doesn't make sense: However their children have to always remember that they are also their parents. I understand what you are trying to say, but it needs to be rewritten. These are just a few of your mistakes. Hope it helps. Good Luck.

Answer 2

I get the gist of what you are saying. Basically parents are parents, not best friends. Children need discipline in order to grow as individuals.
That said, you can't dictate to people about how to bring up their children. Until you have had children you will not know how difficult a job it is. Children do not come with instructions, you sometimes have to make it up as you go along.
Yes, parents of wayward children will be making a hard time for themselves, but to a certain extent that is their choice. I am quite sure that there is help available should they choose to accept/find it.

Answer 3

It reads ok, but I would clean up the grammar and punctuation. I think I would also use a thesaurus to find some alternate words, since some words are overused. Try to be original from sentence to sentence without repeating yourself. Good luck.

Answer 4

I think what u said in the essay was pretty good advise on parenting skills. I'll be suprised if u don't get a good grade.

Answer 5

In the first sentence, you said "It is necessary because .... they want ... "

That's a confusion of needs and wants right up front.