Someone PLEASE HELP me,PLEASR I'M begging you!?

Question

It's necessary for a parent to use the double-edged "sword" of love and
discipline because they want their kids to be obedient and respectful. If a parent tries to be
their children's friend , their kid is not going to take things seriously. He/She are going to
think that everything is a joke that they can get away with. Parents who try to be their kids
friend, set up themselves for problems in the future. If a parent just tries to be a friend
their children will follow their parents example of how they are being raised. Sometimes
parents think that by being their children's friend is going to build a strong relationship,
parents can be their child's friend. However their children have to always remember that
they are also their parents. When their children reach to adulthood their attitude and
rebellion are going to lead to consequences and major problems in the future. A
parent must teach their kids to be obedient , setting up rules and telling them what's
right and wrong. My parents always taugh me manners , because not having them
shows a bad personality about ourselves. I have a cousin and she is 4 and she is
very rebellious , if she doesn't get what she wants she will start to make a big scene
and to make matters worse she will start yelling at her mom in public.I think that her
mom and dad should take action , because thay are setting her up for failure in the future.
Her attitude would not be convenient to them. Children like this are just taking advantage
of their parents and they should take action for this situation. In order to raise a
responsible and compassionate human being , parents need to take action of how
to discipline their children , this is going to benefit both of them.

can someone please read my essay,and give feedback! thank you so much, I will really appreciated.

Please dont write good job,check for mistakes,things that dont make sense. PLEASE. IM BEGGIN!their is no one at the moment to readed to.Im beging PLEASE.i will really appreciated.Thank you.

Answer 1

Kids are the offspring of goats. "It's" is not a proper way to begin a sentence. Many of the sentences have too many thoughts and long...ex.: In order to raise a
responsible and compassionate human being , parents need to take action of how
to discipline their children , this is going to benefit both of them.
better would be: in order to be a more effective parent the role of discipline must be addressed.---effective parent implies that the children will be responsible and compassionate and it will benefit parent and child (we know we are talking about human beings)..."to take action of how"... very bad wording. There is too much for me to continue, I don't want to be cruel, but if your above elementary school, you should do better. Create an outline for a 3 paragraph essay and arrange you thoughts, then put the thoughts into concise sentences.

Answer 2

I like it and I feel you are very wise,however since this is an essay and you are looking for an honest opinion.I think the point you are trying to make about discipline is important,however I think it will raise the question and or concern of the way you think "action" should be taken.What did your parents do successfully that made you who you are today?How did they go about teaching you right from wrong when it came to your behavior and manners?Did they explain what they expected from you and then told you there would be consequences if you did not cooperate,or did they explain nothing to you,but screamed and yelled and spanked you and you were completely oblivious to why?I think discipline,the way you feel is the best approach ,should be a little more clear.Your writing is very intelligent and good I was just left wondering what exactly you feel is the best approach for raising a child as far as discipline is concerned.

Answer 3

yes you need rules. You need to follow those rules and there definately needs to be some consequenses to those rules being broken.

I was raised spare the rod spoil the child. I do not feel that that is the right way to go.

My children have never been hit, They also never hit any one else. I can not say that this type of parenting is easy. There are those days where I feel like screaming.

I have two grown children and three at home still.

when my children act up in the store or some thing like you said. I take them out to the car. we wait till they are calm and then will try again. but they still do not get a treat.

Any time a child is let to go wild they miss important life lessens. such as what some one else feels. or pride in ones own self. you can not be proud of your self if you are not some one, some one else can be proud of.

Answer 4

well, i agree with you for the most part. when i was growing up i think my parents wanted to be my friend much more than a parent. they would be afraid i would get mad at them. then when they did discipline me i think it was more of a shock because it was so out of character.

now that i am a parent i am more firm with my kids than my parents were. not really strict but certainly consistent and firm. if they do throw tantrums (which all kids do at some point), they know that it's not tolerated. if we're in a public place - i will take them and leave.

now, just because your cousin isn't disciplined the way you think she should be doesn't mean she'll grow up to be a rebellious or troubled person. some kids (especially that young) are just strong willed and can't quite communicat how they're feeling so they do it with tantrums or acting out. love and support go a long way!

Answer 5

Im not for sure what grade essay this is for. I would say that up until the 7 or 8 grade this will do and is ok. But this essay for a high schooler has a bit to many of the words "kids, parents, children". Definatly would not work for a student in college. Good luck

Answer 6

very good you r right it is important to be a parent before ever trying to be there friend, with any luck you can end up with both but for the most being a parent is our first job.

Answer 7

It seems good to me but you should explain more the consequences you always talk about. Iunno what your rubrics table is and i don't know what your rules of essays are in your school. But i thought you weren't allowed to use certain persons (i, you..etc). But good job!!

Answer 8

Thats really cool and very well written I think its very deep and heart felt and an easy A+... if not then there is something wrong with the teachers.

Answer 9

Nice job!
And fairly accurately described too

Answer 10

Yeah I thought it was good. it was very informative, I'm sure you will get a good mark.