To those back home
I am gone
yet my memory will go on
kiss the kids I love them so
let them know I had to go
Tell my parents there are no regrets
to those who I fought beside
who came from nation wide
you are all my brothers and sisters
to my bride brush those tears aside
I am here so far yet so near
I am all around in the sky and in the ground
I am in our kids
in your heart
my love caries on
when u need me look to the sky
let your mind fly
I will be there holding your hand
goodbye to those I love
we will meet again one day
we will play in the heavens above
INFO ON POEM i wrote this because i had a friend who died over seas and this is what i thought he would have wanted to say to his loved ones.
2007-03-10 15:34:41 · 14 answers · asked by Gypsy 3 in Politics & Government ➔ Military
i think the website you are looking for is poetry.com not yahoo answers!
2007-03-10 15:38:16 · answer #1 · answered by max power 3 · 0⤊ 4⤋
Short and sweet.
I would be honored to have such a poem read at my funeral, and I would be thrilled to receive such a poem in honor of my loved one.
I like the "who came from nation wide" - nice play on words there. (Instead of Nationwide, making it Nation Wide is a very subtle shading! I like the extra layer of meaning there).
May I make some editing suggestions?
To those back home,
I am gone
yet my memory will go on.
Kiss the kids I love them so,
let them know I had to go.
Tell my parents there are no regrets.
To those who I fought beside,
who came from nation wide,
you are all my brothers and sisters, we Vets.
To my bride brush those tears aside;
I am here so far and yet so near.
I am all around in the sky and in the ground,
I am in our kids,
in your heart,
my love caries on.
When u need me look to the sky,
let your mind fly,
I will be there holding your hand.
Goodbye to those I love,
we will meet again one day,
we will play in the heavens above.
Dunno if any of those'll resonate with you, but If igured you posted here looking for comments AND suggestions. Feel free to use 'em, or ignore 'em as the muse guides you.
Hooah!
Orion
2007-03-11 00:05:18 · answer #2 · answered by Orion 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋
The poem is 'pretty good' and since you 'wrote it from the heart' for a friend who died, I think you deserve a 'standing ovation' ... I'm standing. I'm clapping. And then I'm 'saying a prayer' for you friend ...
2007-03-10 23:53:02 · answer #3 · answered by Kris L 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I really like it. It sounds like one of those touching emails I receive with pictures and music. It's very Sweet. I am sorry about your friend, I've lost one too. They will be remembered as heroes.
2007-03-10 23:53:52 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
I think your poem is just great.
It may be a little short for a 'tribute' poem, but otherwise I think it's just great.
God bless America.
HOOAH!
2007-03-10 23:44:11 · answer #5 · answered by Clark W Griswold 4 · 3⤊ 0⤋
I do like the poem. do you have anymore that you wrote? cuz i would sure love to see them!
god bless america! and you and your friend.
2007-03-11 01:16:16 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
WOW! Sweaty, that is so beautiful.......I appreciate your support and really apologize for your lose......to the family of a fallen soldier.........MY THOUGHTS AND PRAYERS!
ARMY STRONG!
2007-03-11 00:00:37 · answer #7 · answered by ? 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
what a great heart felt poem. i felt it.bless you and your friend.
2007-03-11 20:45:25 · answer #8 · answered by richfraga 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is a beautiful tribute!
2007-03-11 00:03:55 · answer #9 · answered by marmarsie 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I'm sorry about your friend.i think your poem is great
2007-03-10 23:47:06 · answer #10 · answered by support our troops 2 · 3⤊ 0⤋
From the heart and right on.
OOORA
2007-03-11 11:31:21 · answer #11 · answered by milittleguy 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋