You capture my heart
When I just hear you laugh
And though we are young
You're my missing half
When you're playing with children
And showing them love
You make my heart beat
Like your sent from above
You capture my heart
With your captivating beauty
And inspire me to make
Caring for you my duty
When you're walking, you move
With such style and grace
And I could study all day
Every line of your face
I'll search high and low
Until each other we find
But now for today
You exist in my mind
When we are apart
It's you I will miss
And long once again
To taste your sweet kiss
I'll embrace you so close
Each night and each day
But for now I will search
Till I find you .................Someday
I would like to chat on yahoo IM with any girl who likes my poem (or add me to your buddy list)
2007-03-08 08:20:38 · 23 answers · asked by dwsum41@yahoo.com 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
LOL Guess you didn't get enough takers the last time you posted this?!
2007-03-08 08:24:06 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 2⤋
Very corny, but sweet. However, the sweetness is voided by the fact that you're using it as a general pick-up instead of it being intended for a specific girl.
2007-03-08 08:25:47 · answer #2 · answered by notsoswan 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's really nice, but the playing with children part sounds kinda creepy. Maybe you should change it to "caring for children" or something. Just a thought. Very nice though!
2007-03-08 08:26:09 · answer #3 · answered by *This won't hurt a bit* 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's lovely and sweet. However, on line 8, you misuse "your" -- it should be "you're" -- which is a contraction for "you are".
How old are you? I can't really assess HOW good it is without knowing your age (and I'm not hitting on you -- I'm a happily married 42 year-old!)
2007-03-08 08:25:51 · answer #4 · answered by BreadCollision 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
awww such a sweet poem but sorry not interested in u
2007-03-08 08:30:01 · answer #5 · answered by Kelse 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it i also write poems myself you can chat with me anytime on yahoo the screen name is amberr_YO
2007-03-08 08:27:11 · answer #6 · answered by amberr_YO 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your poem is beautiful and romantic. The girls won't be able to leave you alone. Best of luck to you!
2007-03-08 08:26:04 · answer #7 · answered by whrldpz 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like the poem, very sweet
I am married though but good luck
2007-03-08 08:24:26 · answer #8 · answered by neicee 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
why havent i met a guy like you marry me !!! the only problem is "Every line of your face" maybe change that can become miscommunicated !! love it though your such a cutie !!!
2007-03-08 08:25:51 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
awww that is sooo beautiful, I love this poem! How sweet! Any girl would be lucky to have you!!!
2007-03-08 08:24:55 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Thats so freaking sweet... the guy i like doesn't do that stuff, he's always pissed off when i can't come over or he doesn't like what i'm wearing.
2007-03-08 08:25:07 · answer #11 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋