If it sucks tell me it sucks, if it's good....then tell me it's good.
Thanks for reading.
The closest of friends,
But I want to be closer,
When I see you,
You lift me up,
When you're not here,
I fall without you,
I just want to stay high all day.
He loves you,
And she loves me,
But you don't love him,
And I don't love her,
But I do love you.
A mirror of what I see,
You've made me a better person,
I find it hard to tell you,
That you're the only person I see.
Is it worth losing,
Two loves for one,
If that one love,
Is greater than the two?
2007-03-08 06:27:59 · 15 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Okay for anyone confused about the second paragraph....he's with someone, and she's with someone, but all he can think about is her and only wants to be with her.
2007-03-08 06:38:19 · update #1
I like it. You got talent. I like to write poetry too. I haven't in a while but I think you inspired me to start again. Keep up the good work.
2007-03-08 06:32:13 · answer #1 · answered by Blessed and Happy 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Chigga well done,good poetry to me paints a picture,a portrait that speaks in volumes where mere words are just that. continue to let your heart speak in your poetry allowing your readers to be touched in the same way
2007-03-08 14:43:58 · answer #2 · answered by poet 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your poem is self-explanatory and I like it. It somewhat paints a picture with out the sensory details. But, yeah its good.
2007-03-08 14:56:04 · answer #3 · answered by Jus4nangel 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's pretty good, but the second paragraph is kind of confusing.
2007-03-08 14:35:56 · answer #4 · answered by luv 2 shop! 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's ok. If i understood the whoel situation surrounding the poem I might think it was better.
2007-03-08 14:32:19 · answer #5 · answered by Twigward 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i give it 2 thumbs up man good work.
2007-03-08 14:34:04 · answer #6 · answered by Michael F 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats is a very touching poem.
i loved it!
keep posting more
2007-03-08 14:36:02 · answer #7 · answered by taralynXXX 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good work!Its in you so keep it up.
2007-03-08 14:38:59 · answer #8 · answered by momy 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
aww thats so cute
i love it
2007-03-09 15:05:57 · answer #9 · answered by RIOT! 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yeah, not bad!
great poem, indeed!
simple yet true..
2007-03-08 14:41:04 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋