Hey i have written a poem guys, will youl take the effort to read.
I see you and me together for once and forever.....
All the Heavens in my arms
All the flowers, winds and farms.......
I see you and me walking hand in hand...
Far away from this hatefull land!
I see you looking deep into my eys finding love that reaches sky!
I know you will come to me.....
leaving the whole world just for me......
And I'll be wating for you desperately
throughout my life LONELY!
Thank you!
2007-03-08 04:47:03 · 13 answers · asked by Z....... 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Wow that's a good poem!
Someone knows how to write.
2007-03-08 04:56:55 · answer #1 · answered by SPORTS GUY 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Things Wrong
1)whats once and forever 2)how many heavens are there 3)?4)how can you put love & flowers in here and talk about hating the land5) the whole ending What was that all about? you jump around to much ¬ very good at rythmes but keep at it
2007-03-08 05:08:09 · answer #2 · answered by cuddleseg 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOW, thats a very good way to express yourself and show your emotions, Great job and keep writting poems, you are very good at it! Thank you for having us read it!
2007-03-08 04:52:47 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
yeah that how I feel every day want to leave hateful land and find great place where can be joy and caring fun... but being lonely can be so darn desperately
2007-03-08 04:51:13 · answer #4 · answered by greenbaypackers1920 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Zuhi, That's a nice poem, but there is One Who loves you more than anyone and He's always there for you! His name is Jesus Christ - get a Bible and read about Him - start with St. John.
2007-03-08 04:50:54 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Nice poem you have talent. i like the first para. when you say flowers winda and farms, its flows real nice. good job!
2007-03-08 04:49:55 · answer #6 · answered by Skye 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Beautiful just Beautiful!
2007-03-08 04:50:33 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good. Keep writing.
2007-03-08 04:51:09 · answer #8 · answered by marie_fairfax 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good job, now start a band already!
2007-03-08 04:49:50 · answer #9 · answered by Bender 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
luv it!!! publish it and get millions of $$$ girl!!
2007-03-08 04:50:54 · answer #10 · answered by Gurtrude P 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋