I cant live without you anymore....
dear open your wooden heart's door!
Each moment is lonely without you....
like the deep ocean without blue!
Like the disappearance in the dawn of stars.....
where dear where have you gone so far...?
My crazy eyes yet out of the window peep....
searching you who has gone far away from my streets!
Every night i have spent weeping as i lost the hope of your returning!
i cant live without you anymore.......
come dear come back i die before!!!
Thank you for reading everyone!
I would like to know how you found this poem of mine?
2007-03-07 03:59:03 · 13 answers · asked by Z....... 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Performing Arts
You are sad,
But are you mad,
Life is not for dying,
Keep trying,
He will come soon,
Make your life bloom.
2007-03-07 04:14:55 · answer #1 · answered by Rahul 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well your effort deserves an A. I am not connecting with it. You have made an effort to rime. Why can't you live without him or her? What is lonely about life without living? I like the disappearance of the stars!
You should read Pablo Neruda's love sonnet! Best of luck in your pursuit of being a poet!
2007-03-07 15:02:50 · answer #2 · answered by JPR D 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Depressing
2007-03-08 12:55:26 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I MYSELF BEING A POET I THINK YOUR IMAGIANTION IS VAST AND HOPE U ALSO WRITE MORE POEMS BETTER THAN THE POEM U HAVE POSTED NEXTIME. I LIKE COMBINATION OF WOODEN HEART DOORS
OVERALLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL I RATE YOUR POEM A 4.1
I WOULD LIKE TO KNOW IF THIS WAS YOUR 1ST POEM
2007-03-08 12:45:16 · answer #4 · answered by pratyusha 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
excellent you know that i am also a poet i also write many poems i want to collobrate with you for writing many poems as i had found you a good writer email me some good poems for and i will also send
2007-03-07 12:23:25 · answer #5 · answered by AaSHEK 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
hi,
you say that you cant leave without that person.. it is clear that you are the person who is thinking of the loved one.... so you should be for ever so that your loved one is being truely loved by you till yu are loving her until your last possible breath.... make her leave in you feel her in ur heart and arround you...she will be with u... love the ultimate
2007-03-07 12:18:08 · answer #6 · answered by mohan 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Broke in Love?
2007-03-07 12:12:39 · answer #7 · answered by mehta.amit 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The usual teen angst that abounds on this site.
2007-03-07 15:59:14 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its Good
2007-03-07 12:14:51 · answer #9 · answered by Sameer 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i actually like it a lot...its quite moving...i like poems talkin about love...!! if you have any other good ones, could u send them to me to read?? lovely....
2007-03-07 13:00:26 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋