I bet on a horse, caused I liked its name
I should of known, better it ended in lame
He looked pretty good, as he jogged around
A really big ticket, I’ve surely found
He got to the gate, with the tip of his nose
He looked pretty strong, like striking a pose
Then they started to run, around that racetrack
He fell to the rear, and followed the pack
I yelled to the horse, to get up and go
But he has one speed, and that’s mighty slow
Then he started to run, he started to pass
It sure lasted briefly, he ran out of gas
My knees started shaking, I started to sweat
Then one guy beside me, asked who I bet
I told him the name, sipping beer from a glass
He said you poor fella, he’s way up in class
Oh what the hell, I’ll bet one more race
But this time I’ll bet him, to win and to place
But this could be easy, it could be a blast
If only they let me, bet him for last
2007-03-06 21:34:07 · 9 answers · asked by gary_b04901 1 in Sports ➔ Horse Racing
Good poen i give it a 71/2, good hooks, maybe you could be a peomest someday.
2007-03-07 02:36:31 · answer #1 · answered by Wisdom 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A solid 9. By the way, not to be critical, but the correct usage is: "I should HAVE known". Also the term solid ticket is probably regional slang that I am unfamiliar with. Overall it's excellent.
2007-03-07 08:05:32 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
10, 10, 10. This was adorable! Loved it!
2007-03-10 01:24:39 · answer #3 · answered by My_Two_Centz 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'll give it an 8. It was very interesting
2007-03-07 05:08:28 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good!, though it slips through in a few spots i say... 51/2
2007-03-07 12:24:30 · answer #5 · answered by Shhhh 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it was great i wish i could write poems like that. i give it a 10 if u keep writing.i loved it.
2007-03-09 08:53:20 · answer #6 · answered by wild_horses_chick 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I give it 7. I quite liked it, though it's not exactly a classic!...
2007-03-07 00:17:09 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i'll give you a four --- started out okay --- but got lost before the finish line!!
2007-03-06 21:42:00 · answer #8 · answered by bill g 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
1 being the worst......I'd say 8.....I didn't like "it sure lasted briefly" in the third stanza..........otherwise, pretty funny!
2007-03-08 12:22:24 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋