Is this a good poem?

Question

I plan to ask a girl out with this poem...What should the title be...How should I give this to her and ask her out?

Like a lonely star
Out in space
Waiting for that someone
To fit that space

A secret love
It’s all trapped inside
I could love you forever
Until my heart cried

You’re the only one
That I could ever love
You’re a girl of beauty
Like the stars above

Nothing could end this
This feeling inside
I will wait forever
With my arms open wide

What should i add to flow in that i want to go out with her

Im only 13 and i really like this girl. I want this poem to be really thoughtful.
P.S. would this be a good poem to ask a girl out. Sorry for adding so much stuff... I might ask her out tommorow and im really nervous.

Answer 1

i think you are a sweetheart, you can give me dat poem anyday. u are a charmer u have given me and my friend goosebumps

Answer 2

It is a good poem but you'll probably scare the girl if you ask her out with a poem with the word love. The best way to ask a girl out is to straight up do it but if you choose a poem, make it cute, funny, and charming.

Mention you think she is beautiful, you want to get to know her better, and the date (when, where, what). If you do that poetically, you won't scare her and she'll love it.

Answer 3

It's a bit much to ask somebody out. I'ts more of a third-fourth date move. How do you even know she's all the things you say she is in the poem. If a guy gave me that before we even went on a date, I'd think he didn't date very much and was a stalker.

Answer 4

This is an amazing poem. I think a good title for this poem would be "From Afar." A tip for asking this girl out, if your in school still put it in her locker with your name on it, but if your not in school you should just go up to her a say it. Good luck, I hope it works out.

Answer 5

I am a little confused when you siad until my heart cried it sounds as if she did something to hurt you but the rest is ok it is a cute poem but it sounds a little kiddy depending on how old you are but good luck and I hope she likes it.

Answer 6

I'll pull you from the sky above, and ask you to be my one true love, Then on your answer I will await, for only you can decide my hearts fate. ONE STAR might be a great title or STAR GAZING. Good luck

Answer 7

SINCERELY YOURS...

Like a lonely star, high in outer space,
Waiting for someone, to fit that place.
A deep, dark secret, it’s all trapped inside,
I could love no one, how my poor heart cried!
Nothing could end this, this feeling inside,
I'll wait forever, my arms open wide.
Then you came along, oh, heaven divine,
My floodgates opened, oh, beauty sublime!
You've come up to me, stirs my star above,
I have won freedom, I can show my love.
Now you are aware, my feelings so drew,
Will you be my date, and be mine so true?

Answer 8

"My secret Love" it could be a nice title for your poem. And its a sweet poem too. do you know that us girls like it when guys make poems for us, i think that when you give that to her, you don't even have to say anything, because your poem talks... basically, it'll tell her everything that you can't personally say to her

Answer 9

I Loooooove that poem! Its really sweet and cute. Dont worry about how you should ask her. Just give her the poem, she'll like it!

Answer 10

*.*... Nice...That's a cool poem, I bet the girl you're going to give it to will love it! Um... Title, title, I'm usually good with this stuff.... man I can't think of anything... "A love so deep" ? I don't know, go with your guts, and good luck! :]

Answer 11

u dont need 2 add any thing about u wanting to go out with her. w/ that poem she'll probably get it