"The day's just beginning, you see the girl you love, you don't know what to do or say, you're friends, you talk to eachother everyday, on the phone, computer, etc...you're walking with her, talking, laughing, having the time of your life, the sun hits ya, you smile at her she smiles at you, it's time to say goodbye, you hug and walk off...you're walking, past places where we played as kids, later you talk to eachother, time's ending, you say you'll see eachother tomorrow, you know what, you're in goddamn love, is there anything else better in the world"
2007-03-05 08:37:18 · 12 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
It is awesome. I give it 10 out of 10.
2007-03-05 08:39:52 · answer #1 · answered by ? 6 · 5⤊ 1⤋
It's nice. It's not Keats or Tennyson, but I don't think you want it to be.
I have a poem about not winning the game of love I will share:
Permanent Temporary
Our lives both run wrong directions
Yet the feelings pull strongly together
We can’t promise too much for certain
So we promise to be there whenever
I know that there will be tomorrow
I know that we never will marry
I know that I can’t be without you
I become your permanent temporary
You go home to be with your troubles
I go back to my nothing to wait
We realize our next burst of passion
Is held in the rough hands of fate
Never in all our childhood dreams
Does love ever challenge as this
The stem of the rose has so many thorns
Before reaching the flower of bliss
So we share in what hidden joy we find
In worlds alone too large to carry
Knowing in need you can call on me
I am your permanent temporary
2007-03-05 16:41:39 · answer #2 · answered by Your Uncle Dodge! 7 · 1⤊ 1⤋
what a very "real" poem. I'm not so big on the mushy stuff and like to cover things up with metaphors to keep the reader guessing. That is just me however.
2007-03-05 16:42:18 · answer #3 · answered by aphotic nostrum 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
no this is nothing then goddamn love
and there is nothing worse then goddamn women cheating on ya
2007-03-05 16:40:45 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's really good ^_^. And no, there is nothing better than being in love. Kepp up the good work!
2007-03-05 16:41:15 · answer #5 · answered by Bootz 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Gary Glitter would be proud!
But seriously, its garbage.
2007-03-05 16:44:27 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
thx to you I feel about 10secs alive better enjoy it before I forget
2007-03-05 16:41:08 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
not bad, but don't like the profanity near the end.
2007-03-05 16:39:39 · answer #8 · answered by Unknown 3 · 0⤊ 2⤋
its okay....take out the etc....otherwise its pretty good
2007-03-05 16:40:52 · answer #9 · answered by nascarfan 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
i think that you put alot of effort into it
2007-03-05 16:39:14 · answer #10 · answered by shayshay 1 · 1⤊ 1⤋