i have started writing songs. tell me what you think of this one.
He walks by and I pretend to not notice,
but inside I'm burnin' just to say hi.
Chorus:
He might realize I'm alive, but he doesn't care.
I'm just another person in this world.
I'm no more than a grain, of sand on the each.
He steps all over me.
That's all I've got so far. sooo what do you think?
2007-03-03 05:41:04 · 7 answers · asked by Lena Z 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
i think that is awsome!!!!!
you certainly have a telent. explore it!!!
2007-03-03 05:47:55 · answer #1 · answered by sunshine 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It a very good start! I wouldn't mind hearing more. You set it up with the right music, then you might have a hit on you. It sounds like a hip hop song too. Good luck!
2007-03-03 13:45:13 · answer #2 · answered by Tammy 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
hi lena z,
u are the flower
which spreads the fragrance
colour of it gives pleasure at once
do not think u are trampled
ur presense make every one enthralled!
enjoy the life!
2007-03-03 13:50:38 · answer #3 · answered by amarnath 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wats sand on the each? sound better if it sed sand on the beach. its sounds good chik
2007-03-03 13:46:25 · answer #4 · answered by rawr 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
pretty good but you made a mistake, sand on the each? i thought it was beach? its still pretty god.
2007-03-03 13:45:51 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it alot it is just the way i fell about this guy:)
2007-03-11 11:43:17 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
didn't really like it. You should make it rhime a little...
2007-03-03 13:47:28 · answer #7 · answered by Tiko 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋