I cry when the pain comes back,
no one knows what I've lost.
It is a fate I carry alone,
following a path I do not know.
Alone and banished, I walk, feet
bleeding, wrist bleeding.
Again and again i stumble and fall,
with no one to care, no one to
catch me.
Why did the world do this to me,
take this from me?
I miss what I cant have back,
loath the one who killed her.
it was no ones fault just the drunk
who killed her. Murderer.
Good-bye, I'll miss you.
2007-03-02 05:41:23 · 31 answers · asked by Anonymous in Beauty & Style ➔ Skin & Body ➔ Other - Skin & Body
poems dont need 2 rhyme and thnx 4 answering!!!
2007-03-02 05:53:48 · update #1
in answer 2 ocean silver, i dont know really i didnt think about that sry!
2007-03-02 05:55:19 · update #2
Wow thats actually pretty good. I got into it and its really sad and beautiful. Kudos <3
2007-03-02 05:45:06 · answer #1 · answered by Dee 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I majored in lit in college. i could say for this poem, you want some historic past on the poet. It begins out kinda unhappy, with the view. 'Futures i have divorced' maximum like refers to abandoned hopes and aims. The 'do not look again' and knife reference is likely about getting over painful ideas. That it now no longer cuts implies wish. Or likely numbness. The stuff on complacency likely ability he feels he enable someone down by technique of no longer doing something he must have accomplished. subsequently the accusatory voices. The very last paragraph is somewhat more suitable complicated. My experience is that the narrator realized his existence training and acted therefore, subsequently the massive advantages. This guy sounds like a soldier to me. one which believes that no longer taking action at some needed second led to others damage. Now he's grew to develop into that body of ideas round, and positioned some peace. He gave up previous and futile tries and took a diverse way of residing, and he's starting up to discover his existence more suitable profitable. i do not typically like poems, yet my father and mom spents thousands that they did no longer have so i could study a thanks to interpret then. i'm more suitable about novels, inspite of the truth that. again, you'll likely income from understanding something of this author's existence. This one is rather own, previous the final experience of the beauty and cruelty of the global I usually see in lesser poems.
2016-12-05 03:50:38 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow! very pretty. The only thing I suggest is not using the word "killed" twice so close to each other in the last 2 stanzas. It sounds a tiny bit redundant. Otherwise, very beautiful. Also, why is this in the skin and body section? ^-^
2007-03-02 05:53:22 · answer #3 · answered by silver rain 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Yes I do like your poem.. I only have one question I am not understanding the "wrists cut" part..were you thinking of comitting suicide b/c of the loss? I really do like the use of words in the poem. VERY NICE
2007-03-02 18:23:11 · answer #4 · answered by hardcore 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes ur poem is very deep. Sorry 4 ur loss.
2007-03-02 06:06:15 · answer #5 · answered by TORI J 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
beautiful..i can feel how much heart you put into this poem by the way the words were wrote and they trult tell a story close to you heart..
2007-03-02 05:47:40 · answer #6 · answered by FashionRocks 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
OMG!! its such a Beautiful Poem, Honey!! ur soo good!!
u touch pplz hearts!!
2007-03-10 05:31:28 · answer #7 · answered by Angie: No end in sight 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very good. sounds really sad. i'm sorry.
very good poem i can actually feel the sadness and get a picture in my head.
2007-03-02 05:52:55 · answer #8 · answered by delia 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
BEAUTIFUL POEM! and the person named tori j stole my name! sorta... i recently shortened tori j to TJ which gets annoying sumtimes because if i write TJ people say "whose HE?" ... tj can be for a girl too, am i right? sorry for getting off topic...
2007-03-08 08:02:09 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow. That poem was beautiful.
2007-03-09 04:54:34 · answer #10 · answered by Bee!!! 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋