I haven't written a poem in a long time, I wrote one yesterday, I am trying to get my creative juices going, I am a novelist, not a poet, I am just totally stuck in a writing rut....so I thought this would help...what do you think? Feel free to say it sucks...lol.
Change
You hurt me,
So I hurt you,
You say things,
So I say it back,
But you loved me,
So I loved you back.
Searching for others,
Knowing they won't be you,
But it's one like you I am looking for,
Knowing there's only one you,
But we can never be the same.
I wish we would never have been,
But I am glad that we were,
Being with you brings me pain,
But also love,
Things can't be the same,
They always have to change.
2007-03-02 03:20:07 · 15 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Its a pretty awesome poem but i have to say that your tempo and scheming are a little off, i have to say though if you keep working at this you sir could be a very good poet and everyone is right you should be careful where you post it you dont want people to steal your work.
2007-03-02 03:30:50 · answer #1 · answered by Juhboo 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
For me a poem has to have rhythm. It doesn't unavoidably might want to rhyme even though it needs to hit my thoughts. i imagine readability of expression is major besides. i do not opt for to 2d guess what i'm studying about. I continually search for what I time period "poetic gem stones"contained in the textual content.
2016-11-27 00:10:01 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. It's an honest & simplistic piece - don't need big words to convey what you want to say. Lovely.
2007-03-02 03:26:47 · answer #3 · answered by Bugsy 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good quality and very relevant it speaks to many i love it
2007-03-02 03:25:17 · answer #4 · answered by ladyluck 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You've got talent, but be careful where you put it...folks could easily steal your poem if its not copywright
2007-03-02 03:25:11 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I love your poem
2007-03-02 03:23:19 · answer #6 · answered by nikki 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
it's a very sweet poem..
i've just printed it out!
i'll hang it in my room-please write more. i fell in love w/this!!
2007-03-02 03:24:01 · answer #7 · answered by wordsofapoet 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Doesn't seem like your in a slump to me, nice work!
2007-03-02 03:23:43 · answer #8 · answered by Green eyed girl 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No emotion, I didn't feel it.
I write poetry too and it was too stark and cold.
I felt like I was marching as I read it.....
2007-03-02 03:24:17 · answer #9 · answered by doclakewrite 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
wicked awesome poem, it means and says alot to the reader(s)............i sometimes write poetry
2007-03-02 03:25:39 · answer #10 · answered by dianaa..... 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋