Hi, here are some lyrics I recently written, don't worry i'm in my right mind, not depressed or anything. Just tell me what you think, and also what you think the lyrics are about.
Thanks In Advance!
-Joel
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Powerless To Fate
Powerless to fate, death lingers over her feverish soul
Slowly fading away, the black shade ensues
The final breath of life pulsates through the air
Like the cut of a knife, she separates from this world
Eternal damnation casts down its wretched claws
An incantation spoken from a serpent’s tongue
Flailing in darkness, falling, weeping, all hope erased
For this pitiable soul, bereaved is her embrace
He constraints
Spirits raped
Dark master
Let him take
Mortal crestfallen beauty
Dispatched in disarray
Swarming amongst the others
Abundant in decay
2007-03-01 20:09:40 · 4 answers · asked by Remember The 300 Spartans 2 in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
They're ok... but it really depends on the melody.
2007-03-01 20:35:18 · answer #1 · answered by =_= 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hm.. well, I like the lyrics, first off, even though I'm not so sure what they're about. I think the rhythm might be a bit off, but otherwise I love the wording of the whole thing!
You're not into death metal by any chance? Because a friend of mine does lyrics that are similiar-sounding, and that's what he writes them for. ^^
But really great work!
2007-03-01 20:16:34 · answer #2 · answered by Mari-Joanna 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
moral decay or what george bush has done to america.
2007-03-01 20:16:58 · answer #3 · answered by formerlylunesta@yahoo.com 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
constraint is not a verb
other than that, catchy! a hum-able little ditty.
2007-03-01 20:16:46 · answer #4 · answered by answer faerie, V.T., A. M. 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋