Seemed to me,
My eyes were closed.
lost in a dream,
her beauty glows.
Romance and imagination,
when the time came near.
Beauty and love was all I seen,
only her soft words I'd hear.
As I softly caressed her thiegh,
then kissed her on the lips.
I slowly made my way to love,
As I gided her by her hips.
It seemed to me,
my eyes were closed.
Not in a dream,
but still her beauty glows.
2007-03-01 17:05:21 · 6 answers · asked by lovely soul with insite 3 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
this is amazing... i love it!
2007-03-01 17:09:22 · answer #1 · answered by Nicole 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not too bad but the spelling sucks and you seemed to have lost the focus for a bit around her "thiegh"...lol
Plus, "was all I seen"?
2007-03-01 17:10:35 · answer #2 · answered by Jo 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A little problem with grammer as regards past and present tense , but other than that it's good, conveys your feelings.
2007-03-01 18:44:15 · answer #3 · answered by gsha 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
why are you asking ladies only? Do you think that men can't like poems,all you women are alike.
2007-03-02 09:49:12 · answer #4 · answered by NONAME 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
awesome....nice poem
2007-03-01 17:51:56 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
very color full I like it.
2007-03-01 17:10:33 · answer #6 · answered by TJ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋