Shall I let him get close? Shall I let him stand near?
What is my fear?
He never told me he loved me,but he told me he cared.
I don't understand why I'm so scared.
Shall I look in another direction,shall I look another way.
Will he return some other day.
Dwindling along,I see no future to this feeling I know so well.
How can I tell?
What is my journey?
What is my escape?
Is it gasping words on an endless tape?
They told me I would reach my height,but I still can't see the light.
Maybe there's something I tend to miss.
They told me it was in his kiss.
2007-02-28 15:18:19 · 15 answers · asked by kimmysue34 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Story of my life at the moment - it was nice to read.
2007-02-28 16:35:48 · answer #1 · answered by Jezmith 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's good
but
something seems....like unfluent or broken in it
like. some people might think the ending is good. cause like the poem is like which way will i go? i'm totally lost? Should i go back because i love him so? How much of my life and love will it cost? then at the end it just says a statement. some poeple might think that's nice, a clear cut statement. but i think that it should like lead into it, like a pyramid. like, don't just all of a sudden end the poem with the solution. like, end it questionatively, or slowly end it
2007-02-28 23:26:03 · answer #2 · answered by ? 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
its descent, but a little much with all the rhyming. i m sure it means a great deal to u so that is what counts!
2007-02-28 23:22:39 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow. That's really....... deep. I like it. You should submit it to that Chicken Noodle book of poetry for teens!
2007-02-28 23:22:14 · answer #4 · answered by anew_star@sbcglobal.net 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Very Nicely written, i like it.
2007-02-28 23:22:16 · answer #5 · answered by Ms Pollyanna 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Great.
I like it very much.
2007-02-28 23:21:59 · answer #6 · answered by artemis 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I can't complaint
2007-02-28 23:23:25 · answer #7 · answered by Iris 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yep
2007-02-28 23:21:59 · answer #8 · answered by ashleyyy 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that's way cool, good job
2007-02-28 23:23:39 · answer #9 · answered by sunshineangel 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Yes ...did you pen these lyrics???
2007-02-28 23:21:58 · answer #10 · answered by tds_1967 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋