I remember the first time I saw you But boy would i ever know,
That you would be the one twisting up my insides with all the affections that you showed. It started off simple and sweet, but my feelings grew over time. I dont think I've ever fallen this deep with one particular guy in mind. We had great conversation that left everything to desire. With your words, my words YOU inspired.
Everything seemed to come so easy while gazing into your eyes.
All the comfort that I felt help release the tension I had inside.That brisk night when we shared an embrace; not once but twice, Like the simple, platonic kiss that set my heart free that night. The sound of your voice and the touch of your hand, made me feel that one day you could be my "man". How I long for it to be one day,but there are many factors in the way. I have been waiting.Where's your call? Did what we share have any meaning to you at all? But I still have faith in you to come around. Because the Lord won't let me down.
2007-02-27 14:05:40 · 6 answers · asked by drr0711 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Pritty good off the top of your head ... Ill bet it messes w/ your head!!!!
2007-02-27 14:11:59 · answer #1 · answered by lilly l 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
awwwwww thats a sweet poem it overall just great!! It is a great poem and whoever gets it should really appericate the time and effort u put in to this.
2007-02-27 14:09:57 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
^^ I get what you are saying, but some sentences are off and basically ruin the line. If you asked me to rate it, I would give it 8.2/10 I adore how it flows--nice work!
2007-02-27 14:10:43 · answer #3 · answered by ¥§Anaşia 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's good. I would change the word, factors, though. It makes it sound more clinical.
2007-02-27 14:12:05 · answer #4 · answered by mop-27 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
More of a letter than a poem.
2007-02-27 14:09:47 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
u crazy bout him huh?but he suddenly remain silence...u are madly in love with him but u still not sure his feelings...looks like u slept with him..urm,then what he do?u trust him huh?its good to have faith but be careful..dun wana u to crush..but your poem really reflects that you are trully in love with him...
2007-02-27 14:16:45 · answer #6 · answered by DZ9 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋