What do you think of this???

Question

Each prayer i say, each prayer i sing
each prayer i say, heavens ring
God's here, i wont lose faith, God's here, I'll keep on holding on
Angels surround when i cannot see, they're here for me, forever, and long
each prayer i say, each prayer i sing,
God listens and is watching over me at the time i least expect it,
Heavens open, heavens ring, heavens bright
I walk along the shadow line, then i see a light

Everything will be fine as long as i keep a prayer open each night
You never know what a prayer can do, just say it one time and you'll make it through
Each breath i take, each grasp i take,
God's there to see it all
Angles surround when i cannot see, they're here for me, foever, and long
Little things in life, no need to hesitate,
just go fishing in the sea and you'll need good bait
fish swim freely in open water
they eat alge and other things
but see? Thats the point of life
things happen for every reason, so dont take a long breath,
God's there for you, :

I need to write a poem for an essay contest at school and i think its good enough, do you? Please say yes....

Answer 1

Be glad I'm not on the judging panel

Answer 2

I think its an excellent write. I disagree with some of it.......ok , MOST of it. but I wont be a judgemental ******. I'm commenting on the writing not the message. and I must say it is an excellent write

Answer 3

A beautiful poem.

Answer 4

ok poem, but the rhyme scheme in the second part needs work. it's not a very good transition.

Answer 5

I THINK IT WAS NICE AND YOU MADE MY DAY KEEP PRAISING GOD THROUGH YOUR GOOD AND BAD TIMES AMEN

Answer 6

EXCEllent!! good luck