ive writen this poem to express who much she means to me but i dont know how to send it or say it
I love you with all I am
And all I'll ever be.
You are my moon, my sun and stars,
My earth, my sky, my sea.
My love for you goes down and down
Beneath both life and death,
So deep it must remain when I
Have drawn my last faint breath.
Holding you for months and years
Will make Time disappear,
Will make your lips my lips, your face
My face, your tear my tear;
Will make us one strange personage
All intertwined in bliss,
Not man or woman, live or dead--
Just nothing--but a kiss!
i need your help or is to corny and if you hve got any better let me know
2007-02-27 10:06:12 · 16 answers · asked by nightwallwriter 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
it came from your heart, don't change a thing, give it to her just as it is, is beautiful, and i am 100% sure she will love it :)
2007-02-27 10:11:28 · answer #1 · answered by donttalkjustplay05 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think if she loves you she will think that's sweet, don't worry about being to Corny or anything , if its how you feel and came from your heart that's all that matters. once i got a roses are red violets are blue but i still enjoyed it. because the one who wrote it wasn't to good with rhymes but tried.
2007-02-27 18:13:54 · answer #2 · answered by siayae 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Uh. If you've been dating a while, she might find this romantic, corny and all.
If you've only gone on a couple of dates or none at all, this'll scare her away.
A~
2007-02-27 18:20:49 · answer #3 · answered by BigMac2xk 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that was beautiful. and romantic. if any guy ever told me that i would be so inlove with them imeaditly! i think that you should either read it to her or send it to her in the mail or leave in a place where you know she'll see it
good luck!
2007-02-27 18:22:01 · answer #4 · answered by a-hepburn 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its corny
this one is ok
My Fare Lady
where did you ome from?
you had to come from got
cuz you are an angel in my eyes
you give me happiness in my life
i love seeing your hair blowing in the wind
while your on the swings at the park by my house
i love looking deep in to ( blue) eyes
it makes me think i am looking out into the deep (blue sea)
so all's i have to say is please don't
go please don't go and make me...
smile into your deep (blue) eyes!
2007-02-27 18:19:40 · answer #5 · answered by Saber 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats great
uhh mail it
if yew dont know the adress then just give it to her in an envolope=]
2007-02-27 18:10:35 · answer #6 · answered by &d. i. l. i. hawt; 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is beautiful. If that doesn't melt a girl's heart, i don't know what will!! Good Job
2007-02-27 18:35:17 · answer #7 · answered by lilly_of_the_valley 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Desperate to make an impression eh? ANyways...I would melt into your arms! Hehe...
A.L.
2007-02-27 18:12:28 · answer #8 · answered by Angelus L 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Mail It! Mail It! it is so awesome!!And you wrote for her makes even more special!!
2007-02-27 18:21:28 · answer #9 · answered by gibbygirl38 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats really good!! just dont give it to her if you guys arent going out thta will freak her out
2007-02-27 18:27:31 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋