Poem I wrote, is it good?

Question

"The day's just beginning, you see the girl you love, you're friends, you talk to eachother everyday, on the phone, computer, etc, you're walking, talking, laughing, having the time of your life, then the sun hits ya, you smile at her she smiles at you, it's time to say goodbye, you hug and walk off...you're walking, past places where we played as kids, later you talk to eachother, time's ending, you say you'll see eachother tomorrow, you know what, you're in goddamn love, is there anything else better in the world"

Answer 1

Where is the form of this poem? Have stanzas and lines been thrown aside so harshly? There seems little skill in this piece. There is no set rhythm, nor rhyme. I care little if a poem has rhyme, but this "poem" of yours needs something to redeem it if you want it to be a poem. This holds no hair against the great poets of Western civilization. Saying your thoughts does not a poem make, nor feelings of happiness. If you want me to consider this a poem, at least make it appear as one. If this is a poem, then all of my thoughts are poetry, and I hope we as a culture have not sunken so low as to abase the ideal of poetry.

Answer 2

i don`t think this even called a poem ! it`s just thought from your head!

Answer 3

i dont think its poetry, however i thought it was a beautiful love letter until u said godda**

Answer 4

This is so Normal .... Do something better that this .

Answer 5

is it a story or a poem?
seriously!?
cmon..

Answer 6

get rid of the 'etc'

Answer 7

that was really good :)