Hello dad remember me,im the man you thought id never be,im the one who you reduced to tears,dad ive been lonely for 27 years,ya that right my names rob im the one who landed the popstars job,im the one who you dont look dont touch,im the kid who wouldnt amount to much,i believe in my sense of sight and sound,i have always been throughout wont you help me drowned it out,im what i feel and what im feelin is surreal,im a massive spinning wheel thats always digging at my heels but now ive got the faith!
2007-02-22 14:24:02 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
That was reallt good~ Did you write that? If you did, keep up the amazing work!
Mae
2007-02-22 14:34:31 · answer #1 · answered by mae 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
hello dad remember me, I'm the man you thought I'd never be, I'm the one who you reduced to tears, dad I've been alone for 27 years... I'm the one who you don't look don't touch, I'm the kid who wouldn't amount to much... I'm what I feel and what I'm feeling is surreal.
I like that much of it, but the rest is weird and it doesn't match the feel of the lyrics. The rest is unnecessary.
2007-02-22 22:33:13 · answer #2 · answered by huhyftcgbjhu 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like the lyrics in general. Painful. The last line is powerful and I would suggest re-writting the last 2 lines to include something that rhyms with faith.
I believe in my sense of sight and sound, is the last part that flows. Try re-writting it from there. Maybe include something about your future. pain/gain pain/remain Use "pain" somehow.
The beginning is excellent, the ending is poor, but you can improve. :)
2007-02-22 22:35:53 · answer #3 · answered by daughter_helping 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
There's a music category on Answers sweetie. This is Singles & Dating.
2007-02-22 22:28:48 · answer #4 · answered by . 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOW .. EXCELLENT message and one that I can relate to also.
Best of wishes to you for your continued success !!
Congrats !
2007-02-22 22:28:33 · answer #5 · answered by ValleyR 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
has anyone ever told you that you look like ashton kutcher?
2007-02-22 22:29:45 · answer #6 · answered by *Jenny from the block* 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Remember, kids...when they ask you to smoke pot, just say no.
2007-02-22 22:28:03 · answer #7 · answered by Stuart 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
i like them
who is it by?
2007-02-22 22:27:37 · answer #8 · answered by Sarah 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
im not you dad! or i am i ! gasp!
2007-02-22 22:30:55 · answer #9 · answered by [[chicken_fingers]] 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋