Its like Im spinning in circles, surpassing the fall
The world spins around me and I still see it all
The memories play like circulating movie scenes
My speculation was wrong cause now its not what it seems
The rememberance of the sky in the background
The memories play without a solitary sound
Your presence stays here right beside me
But to my surprise you stay in the shadows to be unseen
I remember the day when the tears fell from my eyes
And how you said your most precious goodbye
I stood there awaitng to see your smile brighten
But it didnt happen, and my grip on your hand began to tighten
Through the window I watched the sun fade away
The darkness of the sky let the stars come to play
The everlasting lonliness seems to never disappear
And I realize sometimes things can be just so unclear.
2007-02-20 02:40:13 · 11 answers · asked by sweet18apparatus 4 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
ya ya ya i already read it, like i said you get
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2007-02-21 06:34:20 · answer #1 · answered by Oklahoma Economist 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would give it a 7 out of 10. It's a good poem, but there are spots where it just doesn't flow right. I like a poem with a good flow to it.
2007-02-20 10:50:57 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
on a scale 1-10 id say a 9 that was a good poem.
2007-02-20 10:45:32 · answer #3 · answered by biggest_duke_fan_ever@yahoo.com 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
On a scale of 1 to 10. I would give it a 5.....it's not bad, but it's not outstanding either.
2007-02-20 10:47:32 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
I came here with the intention of mocking your poem...sorry its just my nature...but after reading it I thought it was very good....A tad on the "forced" melancholy, but good all the same...
2007-02-20 10:47:12 · answer #5 · answered by SALMON 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
10 from 10 + bonus.
Even though I don't like this kind of poems.
2007-02-20 12:16:55 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
If this is originally done by you, then, I want to believe it's a reminiscence of a love affair with your ex boyfriend - am I right?
2007-02-20 11:00:09 · answer #7 · answered by mykemejeje 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I write poems myself..
and this is really good..keep it up!
10
2007-02-20 10:56:09 · answer #8 · answered by Gõlden angel 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Its good, but its not secretive enough, you give away what your saying. Doesnt require enough though.
7/10
2007-02-20 10:47:08 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
It was great...I love it
2007-02-20 10:47:27 · answer #10 · answered by redneckchic01 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋