do u think this is a good poem id yes y,if no y?

Question

ok so explain y this is or isnt a good poem thank ya i am 13 and i have lots of poems this is just one of them but i just want to no if u thinks its good or bad
The Ghost Of Sadness

it will always be there,
when u are feeling blue
or when u just,
need someone to talk to

it will stop u from doing,
something u will regret
and if you do it,
it wont ever let you forget

i cant even imagine
wat it would be like
without the ghost of sadness
to guide you through life

this is another peom i wrote,
Girl of stone

Hard as stone
with hidden fears
she loves in silence
no one hears

Eyes of ice
never to melt
locked feelings
never felt

Spirit of steel
never broken
frozen emotions
left unspoken

Heart of gold
sweet as can be
beautiful soul
wanting to be free

Answer 1

Ghost of Sadness needs work. Girl of Stone is much better. I think it shows real promise. If you want to improve as a poet, you should read other people's poetry - there's lots of good stuff out there. Do that and keep writing and watch yourself improve. Good luck.

Answer 2

Dude like no offense to you but your poem kinda sucks. Basically you're saying sadness is there to help us. So if sadness is suppose to "guide us through life" than how come so many people decide to end their lives because of it? Also many people do something they do regret because of sadness. Assuming the "ghost of sadness" is sadness. If it isn't than you might wanna change it to something like the hero of hapiness or some other crap. Anyways you wrote it well it just didn't fit. I wouldn't pursue this as a career so don't quit school.

Answer 3

I think it's ok. idt it's bad or the best. put some more emotion into it. it's kind of bland. u can put some descriptions into it like teardrops...or other things related to sadness and describe it. give it life. i think it's good that you wright poetry, keep at and you'll get better.

Answer 4

i like it except 4 i think it shud b a little longer and the ending shud rhyme like the rest of the poem( =

Answer 5

Very well structed. If you keep this up I think you possibly have a future, although it sometimes doesn't pay very well.

Answer 6

i like it but but it just needs alittle work-keep trying though-comming from another poet

Answer 7

its very heart warming. I like it. you should become a poet.....very talented for only being 13

Answer 8

good job,people will like it! feeling blue sucks

Answer 9

how cute....very good....im a poet and ill say its good {~&hearst;~}

Answer 10

get some pro. help ..please...FAST