OK, this is a love poem, as I'm writing this I'm being inspired by love, but I need help. Wouldn't it be cool lf is she was a user in this site (Man, I could only wish, right?)? Her name is Nohemi, ain't that a pretty name. OK so the poem goes like this:
You are in my thoughts and dreams
You are the who I adore and love
You are my reason for existance
The one who I want to ask out
OK, so this is the problem. I was going to write: "But never get the chance to", after the last verse I wrote, but wouldn't it be more correct if I was to write: "But who I never get the chance to"? I would really appreciate your kind help guys and girls, help a man in love!
2007-02-19 03:00:19 · 6 answers · asked by Loving Life, Always, and Forever 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Second verse:
"You are the one who I adore and love"
2007-02-19 03:04:25 · update #1
No, no lust here, well she has a good body, but I'm not the kind of guy who looks for sex. When I dream about her I dream that I get to talk to her, that we're friends and that sometimes we're a couple.
2007-02-19 03:07:41 · update #2
Oh yeah, the poem will be longer, and please don't type poems, I'll like to finish my poem with my own words, thank you.
2007-02-19 03:09:16 · update #3
You are the one I adore and love.
Whom, I never get the chance to.
2007-02-19 03:27:31 · answer #1 · answered by Granny 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
do this:
You are in my thoughts and dreams
you are the one i dore and love
you are my reason for existance
the one who i want to ask out
but who i never get the chance to
if you could ever just see
how much you mean to me
maybe one day we can be
something like that cause you need it to be longer! but good luck!
2007-02-19 11:07:23 · answer #2 · answered by Saritah Bonita 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
But never get the chance to is much smoother - it fits in with the rest of the poem. Good luck. Lucky lady!
2007-02-19 11:04:38 · answer #3 · answered by Kate 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you are in my thought and dreams
you are the one who i adore and love
you are the reason for my existance even though you cant be seen
you are the one i want to fly with just like a white crested dove
2007-02-19 11:07:03 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Man, if she's in your thoughts and dreams, why would you only want to ask her out? Also, i detect a hint of lust, have you even talked to the girl?
2007-02-19 11:05:48 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
when reading it to me it has a better flow if you put "but never get the chance to" good luck!
2007-02-19 11:04:38 · answer #6 · answered by JennLee 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋