As I gazed out one morning
From the skies, there came a warning
Of impending things to come
For us all, and not for some
Soon the winds will gale
Sending down a mighty hail
We’ll see visions from our past
For some moments, they will last
And some will surely cry
Thinking they are doomed to die
From the sky, an angels face
Searching for those, who fell from grace
Then she covered me with a wing
Protecting me from everything
She said that he has chosen you
And some others, but just a few
You will go out and spread the word
Making sure that it is heard
I said I’ll head the call
And will spread to one and all
He has said the world can live
For our sins, he will forgive
Then I woke up from my sleep
And my promise, I’ll still keep
2007-02-19 02:36:03 · 8 answers · asked by edgar b 1 in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
lovely 10
2007-02-19 02:39:55 · answer #1 · answered by jewel 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
You misspelled "heed" as in listen or hear. There are doctrinal errors such as
"He has said the world can live". He has said any one can live, not the world which will perish. Now this world is not the planet but this world age. It can not live it is the age of flesh.
Your poem sounds very nice and has interesting apocalyptic flavor. Describing a vision of warning first and then half way through the third stanza the warning morphs into your commission. Maybe some break is advised between the end of the warning vision and the beginning of the angelic commission. But then I'm not a poet.
Oh the female angel smacks of current politics. I'm sure many will like that. Except of course the fundies. So then what is your objective? To write a poem easy on the ear or to write a poem easy on the ear which is constrained to truth and can thereby convey truth?
6
2007-02-19 03:01:04 · answer #2 · answered by David P 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
5
2007-02-19 02:43:28 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
10 and a 1/2
2007-02-19 02:42:07 · answer #4 · answered by gwhiz1052 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
8
2007-02-19 02:38:50 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I give you a 20. It is a beautiful poem and I made a copy of it to keep. I am sure that my Grandchildren will love it as well.
Thank you for the hard work.
To God be the glory.
Kait ><>
2007-02-19 03:19:47 · answer #6 · answered by Freedom 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I give it about an 8 and it should be a song. Good job.
2007-02-19 02:49:04 · answer #7 · answered by UFO 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
One problem though.....
All angelic references in scripture are of men....not women.
Although angels do not have a gender in the bible....they do have male names. Other than that.....I'll give it a 7.
2007-02-19 02:40:20 · answer #8 · answered by primoa1970 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋