Is this informal letter too academic for native English speaker?

Question

Dear Susan

Thank you for your previous letter, your description of Dunlochry is fantastic

My home is very different to yours. Even when I’m at home I feel and, unfortunately, hear the boiling life ocean. However, I appreciate it.Though, the city face is constantly changing, it doesn’t become unrecognizable. Every epoch adds some features like pilasters of the Peter’s baroque, the greatest contribution of USSR –the tube, nowadays- ugly high-scrapers and strange alien objects like parcels in neon colors(I have one in neighbourhood, it ruined all harmony of early constructivism on my street ).However, it is just the make-up the city applies in the epoch not to seem too old-fashioned. Through bright ads, McDonalds, supermarkets, posters and the other time tinsel you can see the original StPetersburg which was set up by Peter the Great on the Neva river in 1703

I didn’t want to spit further than the guidebook which calls the city “Living Museum”, I think it is just living
Cheers

Answer 1

some words that will need a dictionary, (for a native english speaker)
EPOCH
PILASTERS
change these words to
ERA
COLUMN
then she'll understand what your talking about.

Answer 2

Yes. Try toning down the words a bit and simplifying the sentence construction. It looks like you dove into the thesaurus. I'm sure your recipient will prefer your own words.

Answer 3

I think your speaking in a lauguage of many many days gone by of yesteryears good english. However if its something to impress someone it may not be so bad.

Answer 4

Needs some work.