Something Good
Just about down and out with life,
Given up on dreams and love.
I gave up to drink and bitterness,
barely struggling to stay above.
Then I saw her searching look,
it seemed to look right thru.
Her beauty stirred my tired soul,
and made me dream of something new.
One night with only a few hours,
she went out to shoot with me,
9 ball games and then it happened;
she started kissing my mouth you see.
But that was the only time she gave me,
Wasn't thru with her boyfriend I guess.
But all the while I was dreaming,
Of how we would spend our time the best.
I finally figured out it was over,
But I couldn't help thinking of what,
all the things we could have done together
I wanted to be with her a lot.
To take her to see my parents and friends,
I'd have shown her off to all.
My love would have shown all around
With her I'd have been at her call.
But here I sit the stupid fool
The dreamer and do-nothing man.
I swear I'd have done anything.
2007-02-15 10:14:38 · 10 answers · asked by merlin_steele 6 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
i'm a poet myself and its very touching and it explains how you feel towards the girl without phisically coming out with it. i think maybe you should give it to a special girl in your life.
2007-02-15 10:37:16 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think you have really great writing skills. It sounds like you must have gotten burned pretty badly. Keep writing though, i know from personal experience that it helps. Alot.
2007-02-15 10:21:08 · answer #2 · answered by Rachel J 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds as if she was not into you, keep writing though, you will make since out of it sooner or later
2007-02-15 10:23:00 · answer #3 · answered by shane s 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like it. You must have put a lot of heart and soul into it.
2007-02-15 10:18:24 · answer #4 · answered by xoxstormcloudxox 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I hope that really didnt happen to you that pretty sad if so im sorry! It was really good tho!
2007-02-15 10:18:34 · answer #5 · answered by Vienna 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very good...can feel the emotion...the rise and the fall.....last section needs a little fine tuning.....good job
2007-02-15 10:21:38 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
aw :( thats a great poem good job
2007-02-15 10:21:06 · answer #7 · answered by shelly 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats really good.u should get that copyrighted
2007-02-15 10:19:41 · answer #8 · answered by xXstiTChesXx 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that's good.u r a real poet,even though i didn't read all of that.
2007-02-15 10:17:42 · answer #9 · answered by ღ♥MadamA.A.♥ღ 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
that sounds so touching i like it
2007-02-15 10:18:19 · answer #10 · answered by JAY 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋