Hi..can you plz proof read my last pargraph of essay to check sentence structure and grammatical error?

Question

In the essay, Minot obviates fear of declining of economy, but it can be true as students now a days gives less effort to studies and more to laborious work, which might results into low standard of living, skill gap or employment instability. Increasing in the number of high skilled immigrants substantiates that we haven’t got skilled people in all the areas of work. If this trend continues, it will give rise to poverty, discrimination and oppression, which eventually affect the economy of our country.

However, working is an “unavoidable” necessity for most of the students in the higher education today and this is unlikely to be change in future. I agree with Minot’s perception regarding out academic future and I hope that more students focus on their studies instead of working and possibly ruining their future career.

Answer 1

comma after "skill gap"
write out the contraction "haven't"
comma after "discrimination"
delete the coma after oppression
why is unavoidable in quotations
"to be changed"
"regarding our academic future"
"more students will focus"
hope i helped
i think over all it is a very good paragraph

Answer 2

In the essay, Minot obviates fear of declining of economy, but it can be true as students today give less effort to studies and more to laborious work, which might result in low standards of living, skill gaps, or employment instability. Increasing the number of high skilled immigrants substantiates the fact that we have no skilled people in all the areas of work. If this trend continues, it will give rise to poverty, discrimination, and oppression, which eventually will affect the economy of our country.

However, working is an “unavoidable” necessity for most of the students in higher education today, and this is unlikely to change in the future. I agree with Minot’s perception regarding our academic future and I hope that more students focus on their studies instead of working and possibly ruining their future careers.

You really need to work on your subject object agreement. Make sure you're using either plural or singular forms. Don't mix them up. It should help to read it aloud. It won't sound right if you're mixing them.

Answer 3

1]"but it can be true as students now a days gives less effort to studies"
change the gives to give.

2]"and more to laborious work, which might results into low standard of living"
change the results to result.

3]"employment instability. Increasing in the number of high skilled immigrants"
change the increasing to increase.

4]"I agree with Minot’s perception regarding out academic future"
change the out to our.

Answer 4

Paragraph 1:
-of "the" declining of "the" economy
-now a days "give"
-which might "result"
-low "standards" of living
-"Increases" in the number
-that we "lack" skilled people

Paragraph 2:
-for most students in higher education-remove "of the", and "the"
-changed in "the" future
-regarding "our" academic future

The changes are in the quotations.

Answer 5

as students now a days give less effort
try to split the first sentence up becuase it seems to long
if its an essay for school, dont use shortend words like havent should be have not
leave out the word "the" in "skilled people in all the areas of work"
add "will" after which in "which eventually affect"
add a "d" at the end of change in "unlikely to be change in future"
should be "our" in "regarding out academic"

Answer 6

complicated to work out why maximum of think of that utilising a parent for sixteen is erroneous: Direct from US government Printing place of work style handbook: 12.4. A parent is used for a single form of 10 or extra aside from the 1st be attentive to the sentence. (See additionally regulations 12.9 and 12.23.) Your comma placement is genuine.