my love
My love for you will last forever
Never to leave you behinde again
Holding oyu, watching your eyes
I can't stand to hear you cry
My heart dies every time
You're the only reason I live
I love you so much, too much to give up
My angel I can't leave you
You are my everything
You have shown my love for the first time
Staring at your pictures
You really are the prettiest girl I have ever seen
No girl can compare to you
All I want and need is you in my life
You have opened my eyes
Making me realize that this is real
Never letting go of you
I will never leave you.
2007-02-13 02:17:12 · 15 answers · asked by yoshi 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
been together 6 months.
no tfo rvalintines day.
2007-02-13 02:29:04 · update #1
Yeah i think she will because it seems that you put your all into it. It takes a real man to express his feeling s and then write it down. She will appreciate it. But you need to separate the verses so it has a rhythm in that way she will be able to remember the verse that stands out to her. It is deep and very intense and shows that you are truly in love with her and that you really want to be with her so if she feels the same you will sweep her of her feet.... Good luck.... but i don't think you will need it.
2007-02-13 02:42:50 · answer #1 · answered by Alise 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm assuming you'll fix the typos, but all in all it's pretty good. You might want to find something to replace the lines:
I can't stand to hear you cry
My heart dies every time
I understand your message, I just think it's a little to sad if you plan to use if for Valentine's Day.
Focus on the love and appreciation.
2007-02-13 10:23:01 · answer #2 · answered by I_Spy 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Wow, that was intense! Um.... you may want to take out some of that all I need is you and your the only reason I live, it's a little much. Also I hope your older then 18, because forever is a long *** time!
Besides that, its cute. I'm sure she'll appreciate your effort
2007-02-13 10:21:55 · answer #3 · answered by Chrystal 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Let me guess... your 16... you think your in love... and that poem will make the girl scared or at least question you if anything. She will probably break your heart within the next 3 years.
Good luck getting over it, I suggest drugs... because it eases the pain till you can get over the realtionship. But then you have to be able to beat addiction.
At least thats what I did.
2007-02-13 10:21:04 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
It's beautiful. She will probably be thrilled. My only suggestion would be to not say "you're the only reason that I live" it sounds a little clingy. Other than that, it's amazing, way to go.
2007-02-13 10:29:48 · answer #5 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is nice but I hope she feels the same way as it sounds alittle like you are obsessed with her. Be careful about saying "never".
2007-02-13 10:21:10 · answer #6 · answered by Kitt 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that's extremely cheesy but it'd probably work.
sometimes corny poems make the girls berzerk.
if you know how to rhyme
you can hit it all the time
until they figure out that you're a jerk
2007-02-13 10:23:00 · answer #7 · answered by ? 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That's nice, you must love her very much. It's a sweet gesture, she'll appreciate it.
2007-02-13 10:21:43 · answer #8 · answered by BKYW 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
awwwwwwwwww...... If she has really strong feelings for you, all right... But if she don't, she might think you are corny... Its nice of you anyways.
2007-02-13 10:22:11 · answer #9 · answered by jan 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
omg shes a really lucky gal :D
2007-02-13 10:20:30 · answer #10 · answered by Cassie 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋