You mean the world to me
I love everything about you.
I don’t know what I’d do
If I had to live without you.
Your love is amazing.
When you look into my eyes,
I’m filled with happiness,
And I get butterflies.
I love your playfulness,
And spending time with you.
We always have fun,
No matter what we do!
I really miss you
When we’re apart.
But I Always keep you
Inside my heart.
You’re everything I want
And everything I desire.
My love for you
Burns hotter than fire.
I’ll always adore you.
My love ends never.
I want to be with you,
Now and forever.
Love Always,
Ashleigh
2007-02-11 16:29:26 · 19 answers · asked by SaintsFan 3 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
I like it. It's uncomplicated and clear. Very much from the heart.
'My love ending never' would have better flow than 'my love ends never' though, and would also extend it to the future tense.
2007-02-11 16:33:28 · answer #1 · answered by Dharma Nature 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I wholeheartedly disagree with the other response. It makes perfect sense. I am not partial to poetry, but this is a sad. It leaves enough to the imagination, but very clearly depicts the scene. The succinctness of it, the rhyme, the imagery. My only criticism is lines 7 and 8 should come after lines 10 and 11 chronologically, or at least how I took it. As well as the imagery of the old willow contradicts with the sea, though alone each works.
2016-05-23 23:49:59 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like it. You should print it out or write it really fancy by hand then make up a card with one of those scrapbooking type themes. (Paper hearts, different color borders.) He will love it. Hope you two have a great Valentines Day. :)
2007-02-11 16:36:07 · answer #3 · answered by Bean62960 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that your poem is sweet & to the point. The point that I got from this poem is that you do care for this man, & he is all that you think about. You probably miss him, even when he is there. So I think that he will know how you feel.
2007-02-11 16:33:57 · answer #4 · answered by sis_jk27 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That was very nice Ashleigh, good job. He'll be swooning at your feet after "you mean the world to me", kind of like "you had me at hello".
2007-02-11 16:34:44 · answer #5 · answered by brooklynsss 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow Thats deep babe! Deep i say, but ur hot to so Ide just give it up,or wear A new Red Thong!
2007-02-11 16:36:17 · answer #6 · answered by rpoker 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very beautiful
2007-02-11 16:37:40 · answer #7 · answered by Z 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow thats really good no criticism here I love it.
Good work-
And this is coming from a long time writer.
2007-02-11 16:32:28 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Criticism? I think I am in Love with you and your poem. It is brilliant!
2007-02-11 16:33:16 · answer #9 · answered by T C 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds like a fifth grader wrote this. There is no real feeling in this poem. Do some more soul searching and I bet you will get it correct. Good Luck
2007-02-11 16:34:27 · answer #10 · answered by Mr. Sir 5 · 0⤊ 4⤋