I'm writing an expository essay about soccer. Here are my first 2 paragraphs:
The event that changed my life the most was soccer. I am really committed to it and so is my family. When it comes to soccer, I am very competitive. I started showing my talent in soccer when I was 7 years old, playing in the park with my friend. I beat him, and my talent continued to show. Whenever I have a soccer game, my mom and dad come to watch. During soccer games, my parents give up their time to bond with me and get to know me better.
The important events that I will always remember include beating my friend 3-0 and helping my old school's soccer team win the opposing team 3-1. This got me a trophy for being the best soccer player in 4th grade. To improve my skill, I play soccer with my friends and dad in the park whenever I have the chance.
What do you think I should put in my 3rd(ending) paragraph.
2007-02-11 08:56:07 · 4 answers · asked by Right here Right now 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Other - Education
Can you show me a sample paragraph.
2007-02-11 09:11:07 · update #1
What about the skills that you have learned and improved upon over the course of the years?
How about the difference that you feel in your heart in a) winning and b) losing?
Or talk about the value of being on a team, since soccer is a team sport, (not like golf or diving, for example)
2007-02-11 09:00:45 · answer #1 · answered by thisbrit 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I good essay normally contains an introduction,a body ,and a conclussion.To conclude maybe you should go with were you see soccer taking you in the future.
2007-02-11 09:03:14 · answer #2 · answered by RhondaJo 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
What you plan on doing in the future seems like a good third topic that'll flow. Maybe, what you plan on doing with soccer? Keep it as a hobby? Go pro?
2007-02-11 08:59:35 · answer #3 · answered by blooperzine 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think you should put that how you enjoy it and if you want to be a soccer player for a team
2007-02-11 09:01:00 · answer #4 · answered by rooroo 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋