It was a white snowy day,
The schools were closed,
The children were out to play,
But Then Came The big Evil snowplow.
The driver was an angry, scary guy,
He had big bushy brows, with scary little eyes,
The children were scared, some of them even cried,
As they saw the big evil snowplow.
He looked like he was getting ready to start plowing,
The children were throwing snowballs at him,
It didn't work but at least they were trying,
But then stopped the big evil snowplow.
The children were scared, as the driver stepped outside,
He went to the back and reached for something,
Then he came with a shovel, right by his side,
Now getting further from the big evil snowplow.
He approached the kids, not looking like that old angry man,
He stuck that shovel in the snow,
"Let's make a happy white snowman",
Said the nice man from the big evil snowplow.
Don't judge people from appearances as you may know,
People can be very nice even if they look really low,
Always look at their heart not what their faces show,
A great example is the man from the Big Evil Snowplow.
2007-02-11 05:54:29 · 15 answers · asked by aj r 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Jokes & Riddles
OK not bad.
2007-02-11 05:57:25 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Some of the criticisms of this piece seem a bit severe to me. It makes a good poem for children. The phrase "big evil snowplow" is known technically as a "repeton" in prosody, meaning that it repeats throughout the poem. There is no requirement that poems must have end-rhymes or any rhymes at all, in fact much of the best modern poetry does not use rhyme.
This is a bit too simple for an adult audience, but I agree younger children should like it. It would also make a great children's book as others have suggested.
I hope this helps.
Adastra,
the Wizzard of Jacksonville
2007-02-11 14:07:21 · answer #2 · answered by jaxwizz 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
It's an OK poem for children, because it's simple and has a good message. In terms of poetry (writing, rhyme, diction, etc) this is not a good poem.
2007-02-11 13:59:08 · answer #3 · answered by Yalena 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very sweet. A little too wordy, so maybe if you condensed it and just stuck with the vital, most "visual" phrases, it would paint the picture a little more clearly. Good work!
2007-02-11 14:00:03 · answer #4 · answered by tamomom 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it would make a good children's book... you could call it
The Big Evil Snowplow.
2007-02-11 14:13:17 · answer #5 · answered by girl_of_your_dreams_1331 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I dont know, I honestly dont. I like the morale and the story but man, how hard is it to rhyme "snowplow"
2007-02-11 14:02:37 · answer #6 · answered by Ben 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Yes, and I think you should make it into a kids' book. I can see the images looking a lot like the popular book "I Stink" which is about a trash truck. :)
2007-02-11 13:58:40 · answer #7 · answered by supervee 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its a children poem?because if it is it needs a little work,but has some potential.
2007-02-11 13:57:31 · answer #8 · answered by Erika 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
There was no rhyme scheme. Sorry but really bad and the morale wasn't that interesting either.
2007-02-11 14:11:05 · answer #9 · answered by it's me 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Um, not that great sorry..But, on the bright side, the story is really wonderful!
2007-02-11 14:15:48 · answer #10 · answered by Air 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
It's not. Reader's Digest material. Sorry.
2007-02-11 13:58:09 · answer #11 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋