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Once upon a time, I was Karla. I was only a shy gal. Everybody mocked me and they called me ape face. I was not dumbest or not so smarter, neither. I was just 12 years old who go to the school. Behind a life in school, I was abandoned by my family. They didn’t deserve to be aware about the experiences I had to cope through. I felt so deflated. I wish I could die! I thought of that in long time. What the surprise was someone read my mind. One day, I tiredly went straight to my bed from all day. When my eyes were about to be under my blanket, suddenly there was a strong tap on my shoulder. I screamed by frighten. I rolled over and looked up at the unfamiliar stranger. That stranger was a guy and he was bulky or something likes that. Astonishing, he seems lovable and tender to me. He seriously confronted me and, “Would you follow me, please?” He said. I was puzzled following behind him as told by him. He guided me into the dark basement of my home. As I took the stairs

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Once, I was Karla. I was only a shy gal. Everybody mocked me and they called me ape face. I wasn't the dumbest, and nor was I the smartest kid either. I was just a 12 years old who go to school.But behind a life in school, I was abandoned by my family. They didn't’t deserve to be aware about the experiences I had to cope. I felt so deflated. I wish I could die! I thought of that in long time. What the surprise was someone read my mind. One day, I felt so tired, I went straight to my bed from all day. When my eyes were about to be under my blanket, suddenly there was a strong tap on my shoulder. Screaming, I had rolled over and had looked up at the unfamiliar stranger. That stranger was a guy. He was bulky or something likes that, but I could not see well in the dark. Astonishing, he seems lovable and tender to me, not the kind to be sneaking around tapping shoulders of random 12 year olds. He confronted me seriously and, “Would you follow me, please?”. I was puzzled but curious following behind him, just like he had told me. He was guiding me into the dark basement of my home. As I took the stairs

Is this better? You had a few typoes and odd sentences.