If I poem please rate 1 -10 1 being the worst?

Question

If I could take myself away
To any place or any day
I think I’d pick a place
Somewhere deep in out of space

And then I’d turn around
To see what I have found
I’ll look down on this earth
The place of all our birth

I looked then to the right
Over there they always fight
To the left I set my eye
Over there, they all do cry

And then I see a spot
Which isn’t cold and isn’t hot
The people seem carefree
That is where I want to be

It then came to me quite clearly
The people there love me dearly
The place I want to be
Is home with family

Answer 1

So sweet and simple - a definite 7 from me!

Answer 2

Did you write it? I am going to assume you did, and I hope this will be construed as constructive criticism.

I'll give it a 6.5.

The theme is fairly common, and the rhyme scheme has been done to death. Part of my feelings on that, however, are a matter of personal tastes. It is also very difficult to come up with creative and original rhyme schemes, so you have chosen a challenging form to work with. I have to give you credit for that. You may consider trying to create a more challenging rhyme-scheme.

What I really like here are some of the images that you create, and the point-of-view. I especially like the fourth stanza, the image of a spot on earth that is perfect. I almost envisioned you having infrared sight, or something, seeing the world as a cold or hot place with one area in view that is in the middle. Balance. Calm. Peace. These are all easily symbolized by this image. I also like that you have a message. The poem means something. This is significant.

One correction I might make: do you mean "outer space" in the last line of the first stanza? "Out of space" is kind of unusual.

On the whole, the poem is sentimental, and perhaps even cheesy. There is nothing wrong with that. You have a message, and you tell that message clearly and in an entertaining way. I could see this on a refrigerator magnet or on the wall in my mother's kitchen.

Answer 3

I'd give it a 7 or an 8! Cuz it really sounded good and sounded like it came from your heart.

Answer 4

That is absolutely beautiful id give it a 10

Answer 5

I'd give you an 8. Sounds like it comes from your heart though.

Answer 6

7 its good. You should have a 360 page and post it on there. I have poems that I did on my 360 page

Answer 7

sooooooooo sweet really imust say u 've used ur heart i'll give 10
if pionts r in my hand then i'll give u 100
70 for language
25 for scheme
5 for simplicity

Answer 8

Very good job...I'd give a 10