Hello. I am in 7th grade and needed help with a found poem that is about basketball. Can anyone help me by telling me how to improve it? Or if it's good or not, maybe a scale of 1-10. Please let me know if there is some words that should be replaced. This is the poem,
"This is my game.
I can cry after a loss
or win like a champ
It depends on the hustle
and how big my heart is.
This is my game.
I can go out to the blacktop courts
and shoot some hoops
just waiting till I hear that swish.
Or just dribble
till I hear the ball bouncing
as fast as a jackhammer.
Always trying to get ready
for my game
to show my MVP quality.
You can hate it or love it
but this is my game that I love
and will love till I die.
2007-02-06 12:46:13 · 6 answers · asked by Mistah Mistah 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Quotations
First of all, hon, if you FOUND the poem, you should not alter it and submit it as yours in any way. That is against the law. And poems don't have to rhyme - most of the best one's don't.
Write from your heart about what you love and it can not be anything but good........" ....two roads diverged in a yellow wood, and be one traveler long i stood, i took the path less traveled, and that has made all the difference." -Robert Frost
2007-02-06 13:03:17 · answer #1 · answered by The French Connection 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It dont rhyme like a poem, but it is good.
This is my game
basketball fame
I shoot the hoops
And miss the loops
I hear the ball bouncin
loud and clear
like a jackhammer in
my ear
http://www.poetry.com
2007-02-06 12:52:36 · answer #2 · answered by sunflare63 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds good. Use a metaphor. Like "I fly like a dove" toward the rim. Something else like: I bask in the moments between the release of the ball and the sound of a swish; it's my home. It's where my heart truly lies.
OR I dunno, maybe, I like Basketball so much that while other guys look at dirty magazines, I look at Sports Equipment Catalogs..LOL!
2007-02-06 12:52:50 · answer #3 · answered by stagger_lee1974 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow dude....that poem sounds great! i just didn't understand the
thing...but other than that wow...probably a 9...good job!!
2007-02-07 11:46:14 · answer #4 · answered by Aisling B 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it sucks. you call this a poem
2007-02-10 12:50:36 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
you should try to make it rhyme more.
2007-02-06 12:54:22 · answer #6 · answered by page starshiine.™ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋