...this is one of my fav poem that Ive written...
pls rate it..1/10
It is impossible to capture in words the feeling I have for you.
Yet when I try to tell you them or try to write them to you
the words do not even begin to touch the depths of my feelings.
Just 3 little words dont seem like enough for someone whose smile still brightens my day..
whose touch can make me forget the rest of my world.
But even though ''I love you'' cant express the depths of my feelings for you..
but since it is the best word that there is..
let me tell you a thousand time ...
''I love you'' more than love.
2007-02-06 01:08:08 · 17 answers · asked by G?ld?n ang?l 5 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Golden Angel. Golden Pen. Beautiful Words. Congrats. I wanna see a Book of your Work, some day! Loved it!
2007-02-06 01:12:15 · answer #1 · answered by Goggles 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I will do a little editing:
Impossible is it to capture in words my feelings for you.
Yet when I try to tell you or write them to you
The words do not even touch the depths of my feelings.
The 3 little words dont seem like enough for someone whose smile still brightens my day..
whose touch make me forget the rest of the world.
Even though ''I love you'' can't express the depth of my feeling for you..
but since it is the best word that there is..
let me tell you a thousand time ...
''I love you'' more than love.
I rate the emotion in your poem: 10/10
2007-02-06 09:18:25 · answer #2 · answered by McNeal 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I give it an 8....only because you didn't seem to capture the longing...the emotion until the last four lines there.
I say, dig in a bit deeper...evoke the emotion from the reader that I can tell is at the surface, but not quite there yet.
I am sure you want to leave the reader gasping for breath at the depth of this emotion.
Almost! But awesome still!!
2007-02-06 09:11:57 · answer #3 · answered by Bathroom Graffiti 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
regular, honestly. Anyone could say that to anyone else. More from the heart and stop being traditional. Really put something in there that only you two will understand, or a time the two of you spent together!
But good emotional expression
2007-02-06 09:12:41 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I give it an 8. I dabbled in poetry writing when i was in school and i still write every now and again. There are a few more things you can add to it to make it flow and to make it a sonnet. But overall it is a nice poem.
2007-02-06 09:11:55 · answer #5 · answered by Osunwole Adeoyin 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Powerful words these are, but as you said so very well, love cannot be defined by words, only by a sensual touch, an unselfish act, a reason for continuing to live...
2007-02-06 09:16:44 · answer #6 · answered by Paul K 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I give it a 2 for the effort, otherwise it's too wishywashy and cliche. It's not creative, and I lost attention to it after the first 2 lines.
2007-02-06 09:34:21 · answer #7 · answered by bruce_lee_headache 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'd rate it an 8 in the second line you should drop the use of the word "them" both times. It will flow better.
2007-02-06 09:11:39 · answer #8 · answered by **Red** 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A whopping 10/10 for your creativity! You go girl!.
2007-02-06 09:12:38 · answer #9 · answered by stiletto 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Thats a sweet poem you must have it real good for a poem like that.
2007-02-06 09:11:43 · answer #10 · answered by gnr_tj 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋