To my bf for valentines day.
We have been together 3 1/2 months. He is 14......we haven't said "I love you" yet....
Is this a good poem?
What should I change?
Thanks!! ;-)
Have a great day!!
2007-02-04 14:15:37 · 6 answers · asked by ♥Charming's Princess♥ 3 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Ooops!!!
Here's the poem [rhyme]
Roses are red
Violets are blue
Do you remember the time I first talked to you?
“You know she likes you, right”
Those were my words
I never thought it was me
who would be yours!!
When you're around
you light up my day
I'm so glad I've found you
don't ever go away
Roses are red
Violets are blue
Prince Charming is great
and so are you!
This Valentines Day
I just wanted to say
how special to me you are
in so many ways.
Roses are red
violets are blue
nothing is better than being with you!!
2007-02-04 14:19:32 · update #1
where's the poem? lol
2007-02-04 14:17:51 · answer #1 · answered by ♥ms.peREz?♥ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow. I wish I knew a girl who would go to this trouble for me.
This is really pretty great.
thoughts.
I would cut out the 2nd stanza using 'roses are red..' make it just the first stanza and last stanza that use 'roses are red..' this brings things full loop and informs the listener that you are coming to a conclusion.
Try to control syllable count such that each 4 line stanza has:
x syllables
y syllables
x syllables
y syllables
(but don't get overly concerned trying to follow this.. the meaning of the words are more important)
it's a great poem, make sure you find the right time to say it (i.e. probably later on). Make sure you understand how vulnerable you're making yourself with a poem like this - unless he's a dork he's going to believe that he has the opportunity to get pretty physical with you. Make sure this is what you want and make sure that he's earned this poem. If he hasn't done anything historically that truly proves his love to you, I strong suggest you *don't* give him this poem. basically just be 100% sure it's mr. right who get this.
2007-02-04 22:52:28 · answer #2 · answered by lucky guy 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hey Poem writer!
Roses are Pink
Your poem doesn't stink!
Your heart was in it
and you poured out your soul,
You'll win his heart and that is your goal!
Have a great day
2007-02-04 22:25:30 · answer #3 · answered by Babs S 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Where's the poem?
2007-02-04 22:18:04 · answer #4 · answered by julia 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I guess we can't answer without seeing the poem ...........
2007-02-04 22:19:18 · answer #5 · answered by Sexygeminibabe5 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. Actually, may I use it myself, lol?
2007-02-04 22:28:03 · answer #6 · answered by Nova 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋