A good friend of mine writes original songs for special occasions. He said he is still in the process of writing this as a proposal song! He asked me what I thought {honest critique} so I thought I would ask you what you thought? Imagine it as a song
When you came into my life
I found someone who makes my life complete
I have found the love, I’ve waited for
So at this moment
I ask you, will you become my wife
Like the seed finds warmth of spring
I’ve found the warmth your love can bring
I’ll vow my love to you for all my life
So at this moment
I ask you, will you become my wife
Copyright © 2006
2007-02-02 12:50:39 · 10 answers · asked by GW 3 in Family & Relationships ➔ Weddings
I think it is a very nice song.
However, since he asks at the end of the first verse "Will you become my wife" I think she will be too excited at that point to listen to the rest of the song. He could maybe leave the actual question till the end, so she can enjoy the whole song.
2007-02-02 12:55:33 · answer #1 · answered by Christine M 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I agree with the person who said the question should be at the very end.
If I were the girl, I would like to hear about how wonderful I am, how pretty, how smart and witty and how I am the only one he would ever want to marry. Usually girls don't hear these kinds of things and they should be told more often!
2007-02-02 13:56:16 · answer #2 · answered by can'tstopthinkingaboutthis 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think it's great. I would love that, it's very creative.
My dad writes poetry and songs, he wrote and performed a song for my wedding, I just loved it.
2007-02-02 15:28:07 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Creative, sweet, sincere, thoughtful, something that took time to think about. Wondrful!!! Any girl SHOULD love it.
2007-02-03 07:46:16 · answer #4 · answered by mimegamy 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it.. just that the first line "when you came into my life" and the 2nd line "i found someone who makes my life complete"
it makes it seem like "you" and the "someone" is not the same person.. maybe its just me!
2007-02-02 12:53:49 · answer #5 · answered by anna 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
That kiddo is divine. I can say nothing bad about that poetry. Regardless of what may occur in life - i hope it lasts...:)>
Well done....
2007-02-02 12:56:08 · answer #6 · answered by ? 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think that is beautiiful and very sweet. i wish u luck!
2007-02-02 14:26:38 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2007-02-05 14:04:26 · answer #8 · answered by AP&AP 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That's great, if she's into that kind of stuff.
2007-02-02 12:54:38 · answer #9 · answered by cy ko tic 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is sweet
2007-02-02 12:58:23 · answer #10 · answered by undercovernudist 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋