Can you critique this song??
Verse I
I never had, anyone to hold
No one girl, to call my own
Always afraid of what people might say
That only forced me to push you away
Prechorus
I waited for the answer, so I could clear my head
But I failed to realize, that God sent you instead
Chorus
You came to me on the wings of an angel
But I was blinded by all of my lies
Now I know that you are my answer
Now I see, that you belong in my life
Verse II
I always thought I would be alone
No one to care for, or to call my own
My doubts and fears, are here no more
You’re the one that my heart longed for
Prechorus again
Chorus
2007-02-01 08:10:27 · 10 answers · asked by kylesegarra 2 in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
I wrote it. And no worries, it is copyrighted. You can hear the song at www.myspace.com/fightingunder. The recording of it on that site was just me getting the guitar down for it and remembering the lyrics.
2007-02-01 08:23:15 · update #1
wow, i love the words! who is the author and can i get it on iTunes? yea, i think it is a really awesome song...it shows the truth of how people live and don't realize how God is present in so many ways of their life! God bless~
2007-02-01 08:14:58 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Wow that was really nice! But can I suggest something?
On the second line of the 1st verse I think u should change No one girl to maybe Not one girl? what do u think. But seriously that was really nice! I'm a poet, and I love poetry and nice lyrics!
2007-02-01 16:13:44 · answer #2 · answered by ♦Bl!nd PoeT♦ 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
To answer your question i'm pentacostal which is a variant of christianity. To critique your song, I like it and would love to hear it to music. It describes very well the way we don't realize that we need Jesus
2007-02-01 16:36:13 · answer #3 · answered by iwillprayforyou_91606 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I just stole your lyrics and will put them to a song tonight. You wont make a red cent Muahahahahahaha
2007-02-01 16:13:53 · answer #4 · answered by Sean 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It doesn't parse well into a 4/4 beat.
2007-02-01 16:16:18 · answer #5 · answered by S K 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I'm a Christian and I love your song. It's touching and well written. Good job.
2007-02-01 16:51:02 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
My religion is a personal choice.
2007-02-01 16:26:17 · answer #7 · answered by metoo 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Did Westlife sing that? lol
Hey... you know what... i met a bunch of Christian musicians who used sing about religion and Jesus Christ... guess what they called themselves... Delirious!! Oh, the irony!
2007-02-01 16:17:35 · answer #8 · answered by Dare Me 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
shoot me now.
2007-02-01 16:17:10 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Gay gay gay gay gay.
2007-02-01 16:28:48 · answer #10 · answered by Malcolm Knoxville 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋