I love to hear,
To different music,
I love the diversity of NYS
That grows nonstop
I love the the diversity of the people,
Who live and share this state, With others
That is what makes this state so special
Here we people from all over the world that have love and compassion towards others
We appreciate the diversity in our common humanity
That inspires the spirit, heart, and mind.
PLease help me edit this?
2007-01-30 01:51:04 · 6 answers · asked by Ram 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Quotations
Well, i really don't thinkt hat you should put the mucis part in at all. if you do, you might want to put it near the end. it really doesn't mike much sence at the beginning. and you should change the NYS to NYC b/c i was confused as to what NYS was.
2007-01-30 02:04:08 · answer #1 · answered by rissa 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love the sound,
Of different music,
. . .
Here we the people from . . .
Appreciate the diversity . . .
The . . . means keep what you have written and change only the parts I have written, which is very little. Just to make it more cohesive. Sounds great.
Or, if you want a drastic change here is an option:
I love the whimsical sound of different music.
I love the growing, nonstop diversity of NYS.
I love the diversity of cultural people, who unite and share this state.
This is what makes this state so special than all the rest.
We appreciate the diversity in our common, yet unique humanities formed over past generations from all over the world.
Through love and compassion towards one another,
Facing dangers head on and looking fear in the face,
Still, we stand united as one!
2007-01-30 02:43:03 · answer #2 · answered by Jules 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Here you go:
We are people from all over the world.
We love and show kindness to all
We feel affection for and take notice of,
the different music.
I love the variety of NYS
That grows nonstop
I love the assortment of the people
Who live and share this state,
They are what make us special.
We are people from all over the world
We love and show kindness to all.
We appreciate the diversity in our common civilization
That inspires the fortitude, kindness, and intellect
Of all who come to play or stay.
2007-01-30 03:11:33 · answer #3 · answered by jeeccentricx2 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"the different music...";
" I love the diversity of the people..."
"Who live and share this state with others.."
"We are people from all over the world who have love and compassion toward others..."
2007-01-30 06:37:35 · answer #4 · answered by Bud's Girl 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Put 'listen' instead of 'hear.'
"Here are people'------ 'having' instead of 'that have.'
2007-01-30 04:41:15 · answer #5 · answered by yakkydoc 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think you can make it rhyme more!
2007-01-30 09:45:20 · answer #6 · answered by chey 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋