I never knew there would be a better tomorrow
But you've come into my life and taken away all my sorrow
My days of sadness are a thing of the past
Because I have found true love at last
My days of emptiness are gone for good
Because you fill a void in my heart that you should
You've opened a window
You've shown me the light
And my love for you will continue to burn bright.
or..........................................
The moment I opened my heart and let you in
I saw this great love starting to begin.
I opened my eyes to a vision of you
I hope, I pray your feelings are true.
I have loved and I have paid the cost
And I have felt the pain of the love I lost.
But, now, I think I have truly found
An Angel who walks upon the ground.
You go beyond all limits for me
Just to show your love endlessly.
I could search my whole life through
And never find another 'you'.
You are so special that I wanted you to know
I truly, completely love you so.
2007-01-28 14:27:17 · 4 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Which one is better ?...
They are both beautiful.. in different ways...And i guess, the sentiment is kind of the same, that is my perception.
Son demasiado bonitos sabes. I..I..I hope your inspiration really appreciate these words ...
2007-01-28 14:39:22 · answer #1 · answered by NA 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
They're okay. I think you should work on something that doesn't rhyme because it sounds a little juvenile. Here's an original break-up poem by me. You can use just switch it up a little bit to make it your own.
I daydream of what it would be like
To spend a never-ending moment with you
I wished that we could share heartbeats
Share our desire, agony, ecstasy, passion and dreams
We would satiate our curiosities moment by moment
My heart would leap like a jaguar when you spoke to me
I could close my eyes and move to the bass of your voice
Your kisses would soothe me
Your touch would surround me
Your soul would shelter me
We would not just make love
We would become love, real love
I choose to live in dreams rather than reality
In reality we do not exist
You took my heartbeat from me
We became a dreamlike state of altered consciousnessa figment of my imagination
I can hold on only to what dreams may come
A figurative, slight spark of hope held with both hands
Hoping the end could be just the beginning
2007-01-28 22:34:15 · answer #2 · answered by Bonita Applebaum 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
They are both wonderful and totally pwn my poetry skills. xD Being serious again, I really think they're deep and whoever receives them will feel very touched and special.
2007-01-28 22:30:36 · answer #3 · answered by devilishangelgirl10 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
there both good
2007-01-28 22:30:00 · answer #4 · answered by rat_leg danny 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋