For those of you who do not care
For this world we have to share
Look around and you shall see
What this world is meant to be
All our children they will know
Its our effects, we do show
All our children need to play
Lets join together, show the way
Doesn’t matter whats their skin
Lets show them all, they are kin
In this world theres too much greed
Its there really all that need
Look around and see the sign
We are dooming our mankind
For this world is full of hate
One would think, its our fate
Lets make this world a better place
So when we leave, theres no disgrace
Lets make a stand, and take the lead
By kneeling down, plant the seed
2007-01-27 21:43:20 · 7 answers · asked by gary_b04901 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Family
Very good 9/10
2007-01-27 21:48:58 · answer #1 · answered by sticky 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I write poetry and song lyrics and I must say this poem has feeling and is something we can all relate to,which is what a poem is ment to do, the words are meaningful and the presentation of the poem is great! 10/10
2007-01-27 21:54:38 · answer #2 · answered by ¸•¨*•.¸AnGeL¸.•*¨•¸ 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that's a terrific poem. i like it. It holds heartrending fact in it. I supply it a a hundred out of ten. i am going over the dimensions in this one. i'm sorry i could not shop it interior it regardless of the undeniable fact that. not many human beings can write poems like this. sturdy interest, i'm hoping to verify extra in case you have any.
2016-12-17 04:21:20 · answer #3 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
8 rating
2007-01-27 21:49:19 · answer #4 · answered by imatptor 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Hi, obviously I don't know the ages of your children, but good on them, this is excellent
10/10 (+1 for good luck lol)
2007-01-27 21:48:41 · answer #5 · answered by Chris G 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I really like it....I would give it a 9/10
However there is a typo on this line......
Its there really all that need.....
should it read.......Is there really all that need........
Other wise hats off...great job!
best wishes
2007-01-27 22:11:09 · answer #6 · answered by travelingirl005 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i say its great!!
10/10
2007-01-27 22:01:20 · answer #7 · answered by princess 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋