He Was My One And Only Love,
But Now He’s With Another Dove.
I Would Stop The World,
To Be His One And Only Girl.
In The End He Broke My Heart,
But He Loved Me At The Start.
I Thought We Would Last Long,
But I Guess Our Love Wasn’t Strong.
My Heart Will Never Mend,
Because We Came To An End.
2007-01-27 13:32:18 · 17 answers · asked by Pshtt Baby x3 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
It's fair
2007-01-27 13:35:49 · answer #1 · answered by JB 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it sounds good bc it comes from the heart. A bit rhymey (is that a word lol) though. It make you think though and I don't even like poetry
2007-01-27 13:39:20 · answer #2 · answered by uthinkso 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This poem was pretty good. But just for constructive criticism, ( since Ive won prizes for my poems) I would tell u that rhyming doesnt always matter. Let it come from the heart. Dont sit and think..........what ryhmes with this word................ But otherwise it was good.
2007-01-27 13:37:43 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
personally i really like it. i wish i had the talent to write poems cause i really love poetry. and if its about ur life im sorry about the guy but that just means there will be guy alot much better for u and he wont leave you. so i really like it and good luck with the rest of ur poetry
2007-01-27 13:38:14 · answer #4 · answered by <3iluvluv<3 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Depends what for! In my oppinion i would recommend entering it into a poetry contest! I really like it.. Poetry is about letting your feelings out in a different way i really like it! Good job ***** (five star)
Good Luck!! Keep writeing!
2007-01-27 13:36:07 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good for a Valentine, but the meter is choppy for a rhyming poem...I'd grade it C+.
2007-01-27 13:39:08 · answer #6 · answered by ladystardonna 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
poetry sould be about feelings, and if thats how you feel then its of most excelents. also it shouldnt matter what anyone else thinks because yet again the poem is based on the authors feelings.
2007-01-27 13:37:11 · answer #7 · answered by Kat the Almighty 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
oh my past love
how i wish you hadn't left
but now that iam here alone
i see all that you've thrown.
and i ask that it's my love that you treasure
and not my looks that you measure.
because in the end i will see you again
and it's your ego that will need to mend.
"that's more like it! give him what he really deserves...:)"
2007-01-27 13:48:09 · answer #8 · answered by gracy808 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yes that was the bam it tought my heart and you know I have a boyfriend to and I hope our love stays strong or not I'll just read your poem.
2007-01-27 13:37:49 · answer #9 · answered by Rachell G 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's not a poen but a rhyme. Long and strong aren't rhyming words.
Keep studying.
2007-01-27 13:36:20 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋