Everybody wants to see,
A girl that I know I can't be.
No matter what I say or do,
A perfect person walks on through.
Although she's non existent,
My family, friends, and peers,
Seem to see her everywhere,
But when I look, she disappears.
She jumps through math with straight As,
While I barely lag behind.
She's dating every boy in school,
While they're only on my mind.
She wakes up, takes a shower,
Needs no makeup on her face.
While I slowly walk beside her,
Use more makeup than this race.
I don't know why I must be her,
When I could just be me.
I guess she is the new me,
And I'm leftover debris.
The boy I'd only dream of,
He is nowhere near my reach.
Yet he's standing right beside her,
And she doesn't even see.
She takes it all forgranted,
As it's taken from her side.
And only when she sees it,
does she even realize…
©2006 Raine Nicole
2007-01-26 08:10:16 · 14 answers · asked by Rain Nicole S 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
How is it?
2007-01-26 08:10:34 · update #1
That was deep. I really enjoyed reading this poem. You are talented you should start a book of poems if you haven't already
2007-01-26 08:21:21 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's OK like bacon and lard
Kind of make your brain a retard.
So keep trying for the big push
Yeah that's right, get off your tush!
But I'm thinking you're kind of out of luck,
Because I still think your poem SUCKS!
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2007-01-26 08:23:04 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
This rocks it should be published. Hey but dont worry HS is hard and I promise the best of your days is yet to come
2007-01-26 08:27:12 · answer #3 · answered by for_runner0 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's hard to get the main point
Worked to hard to rhyme the joint.
Try to ease up and let the words fall
Your emotions will shine- that is all.
2007-01-26 08:17:43 · answer #4 · answered by copromethias 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very cute! Keep it up and you may be able to parlay that in to a career.
Good luck!!
2007-01-26 08:18:38 · answer #5 · answered by Bathroom Graffiti 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
omg that is soooooooooooooooooooo beautiful u should be sooooooooooooooooooo freaking proud im serious that is really pretty and inspirational i wish i could write poetry like that
bravo :)
2007-01-26 08:17:14 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its gd i write poems 2 sum in eng n spanish but their about love and breaking up
2007-01-26 08:22:40 · answer #7 · answered by ♥Angelita29♥ILY♥ 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good write more.you have a talent.
2007-01-26 08:59:38 · answer #8 · answered by lynda w 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Kind
2007-01-26 08:18:15 · answer #9 · answered by vandom 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
damn, thats pretty good... that would be really cool if you made it a song or something like that.
2007-01-26 08:17:16 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋