Sometimes you may not realize how much you love someone untill they’re gone. The ones you love may test you in so many ways and they may torment you, put you through stress, pain and misery, but in the end it is them who you come home to everyday. It’s them that you love and worry about. When they are hurt, you come running. When they are gone and you are the one who is worried. You may lie, you may pronounce with deception but your really just mixed up in your own feelings. It’s inscrutable to say how much you really love them and how much you really just want to be able to come home and see their face every day. To just be able to say I love you and never leave me. When your love is tested to see if it’s really worth caring anymore. If the affection you feel every day and the pain your put through is really worth it. It will always be worth it though. No matter how many times they put you through dissmay, you’ll still be there. No matter how many times they abandon you and leave you alone with no explanation. You will be there awaiting there return with nothing else but there safe return on your mind. It is during these times that you realize how much you really love them and it is during these times that your love for each other will grow stronger and stronger as life lingers on.
-Valeri-age 14- 1/26/07
2007-01-26 07:22:57 · 10 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Quotations
I think it's excellent for self-realization.
It is the type of conclusion we all must come to at one stage; so it certainly universally applies.
You wrote that at 14, though, Valeri; did you?
So that's very good, Honey ... very good!
Yeah ... one thing I realized when I was very young, like you, was that Love is primarily the result of sacrifice.
When you sacrifice some of your choices in favour of someone else, or when you simply sacrifice your time or what you could be doing with it, for someone else, you begin to build a love for them, for, in effect, you are giving them your life - or part of it.
That simple exercise of giving of yourself, in and of itself, builds love.
That's why we love those we live with, provided we do make certain sacrifices for them as we go along.
If we are constantly selfish and avoid family contact, our love will not be strong enough top with stand "the fiery darts of the adversary" as holy writ says.
But, really, Valeri, this is very good, young lady ... very good indeed.
Keep practising; you might make a big positive difference to someone some day.
2007-01-26 07:58:52 · answer #1 · answered by dr c 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. It is full of positive emotion, and good to read if someone suffers loss of a loved one. Change "your" to "you're". Dump the word "inscrutable" and change it to simply "impossible".
"Dismay" has one "s". ...awaiting their return, not there return... and same for next line...
Not bad for age 14. You go, girl.
2007-01-26 07:36:01 · answer #2 · answered by DinDjinn 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's pretty good, if not a little cliche. . . . Sounds like what everybody else has said on the same subject
2007-01-26 07:31:29 · answer #3 · answered by J Candid 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is pretty good for a girl your age you have the skills to be a writer
2007-01-26 07:34:35 · answer #4 · answered by Tammi R 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow your really talented. u must be a freshman or an 8th grader, and i'm older than that and could never write that good. congratulations. but it sounds like alot of other poems i've heard.
2007-01-26 13:40:51 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow girl!! that was really touching it certainly hit home for me on more than one subject, keep writing like that and you will make it far!
2007-01-27 11:01:26 · answer #6 · answered by Bethy 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOO HOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i love it..i want it, lol!!! hey can you email me and lemme know if youd let me print it out then tape it in my locker? i can put your name under it nd everything--- kykygoo@yahoo.com
Thank you!~ i think its awesome and i love it and i really wish i could write that good, hey i wrote this sad thing jus email me and ill let you read it maybe youd like it---if your into those story/poem/quote stuff like me :-D...
Seeya!!!
Ky
2007-01-26 11:04:43 · answer #7 · answered by kykygoo 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is very good and you did a perfect job at writing it also for sure it is the best one i have read also
2007-01-26 07:33:57 · answer #8 · answered by harold g 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it...you're a great writer
2007-01-26 07:30:44 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very good, Valeri, very good!!
2007-01-26 08:14:15 · answer #10 · answered by Caleb's Mom 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋