Love is a rose
Love is a rose, awakened by morn,
Its beauty shines so bright.
Its fragrance lifted through the air,
Its petals know no night.
Love is a rose, surrounded by dark.
Its petals wet with tears,
The sting of its thorns are harsh and crule.
It hurts the ones so near.
- That's it. I know it may have some gramatical errors, I'm a bad speller. I don't need to know what I've misspelled. Just tell me what you think of it. Thank you.
2007-01-25 15:27:45 · 5 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
I thought that some of the metaphysical imagery was particularly effective. Interesting rhythmic devices too, which seemed to counterpoint the surrealism of the underlying metaphor of the humanity of the poet's compassionate soul, which contrives through the medium of the verse structure to sublimate this, transcend that, and come to terms with the fundamental dichotomies of the other and one is left with a profound and vivid insight into whatever it was the poem is about!
2007-01-25 15:38:00 · answer #1 · answered by ThinkaboutThis 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I like what you got ,but I would go more like . surrounded by dark, with petals wet from tears. love is a rose ,morning is a awakened .. still I like what you got . keep up the writing
2007-01-25 23:40:32 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's good. It's not just empty words, it represents feeling. You present the depth of that feeling very well. Good job, keep it up.
2007-01-25 23:37:00 · answer #3 · answered by kj 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
that is a great poem i would totaly fall 4 it
2007-01-25 23:41:43 · answer #4 · answered by GaBbY 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it sounds great. Are you finished with it or are you going to add more?
2007-01-25 23:38:03 · answer #5 · answered by melanie c 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋