Is this thesis statement correct? "Job competition has became very complex without the proper education?"

Question

I feel like i should reword that. Am i doing something wrong? Do i have the right idea about a thesis statement?

Answer 1

I think you have the right idea about a thesis statement, yes, but I do also think you should reword a few things.

"Has became" is wrong. You need "has become". (Become is the past participle of become.) Or just "is", if this has always been the case.

I don't know if "complex" is what you mean. Is job competition more complicated because so many people aren't educated, or is it just that it's hard to find a job?

"Without the proper education" is just hanging there--we don't know WHO doesn't have the proper education. Job seekers? Interviewers?

From what you've written, I'd guess that your essay focusses on hirers who don't have the skills they need to hire the right people, possibly now have to rely on independent measures (IQ or personality tests). If it's not that, definitely rewrite it.

Answer 2

It can be reworded as follows with least amount of modification:
JOB COMPETITION HAS BECOME VERY COMPLEX AND NEEDS PROPER EDUCATION.
Please contact your professor for the needful. I do hope that your suggestion is taken in the right spirit and is appreciated.